Around they gathered, one and all,
Thousands of them, rich in grace
Markin' thy presence to the Night Queen 's call
To play the game at the night sky's isle.
"Sssssshhhhhh....", she said with a sweet embrace
As she began her tale of the passing days.
"Far below in a distant land.. "
Soft and slow, her tale began
Eyes of passion melting with love,
Immaculate words, all so grand.
With eager guests gaping at ease,
Tiny ears, would her stories please.
The breeze which goes sweeping by
Would pause to kiss on cheeks so frail,
And watch the twinkle brightly shine,
While she sings alone, beside the dale,
Her melody voice with an echo mild
Would recite aloud this earthly tale.
Leaves of yonder would gently pass
To mark the time gliding by
While fairies smile on the dark green grass,
And wave their wings in pure delight
Lost in awe, at the mysteries told
Beaming smiles, that caress the night.
"Now its time, so gather on ground
My dear kids, do what I have told,
Start a smile and pass them around
The world is in need, so share your glow
They would await, I know
Those poor mortals below..
Thus go the fairies, one by one
And take their place in the secret isle,
They sparkle, shine and begin to smile
With utmost joy at the task well done,
As they look below with ample love
For the mortal man to gaze above.
From the night isle's throne, she sees them
Deck the sky in multitude,
Her thoughts and love, shall not die,
A vacant place, would her breasts not deny,
To the earth she gives, an embrace free,
And wrinkles dare not kindle thee.
For grace has moulded thy form
And charm has touched her face.
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Written August 10th, 2006
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Holy crap!!! This is amazing! It reads like one of the Classics we used to read in school! Absolutly perfect! And the background adds even more to it! The picture works so well for it, too! I stand in awe of your creation!
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reminds me of tinkerbell and peter pan. the magic of a lovely story. a very beautiful write. very inspiring. very much needed in this dreadful world we live in.
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very nice tale and entry into the contest.
Jim -
beautiful...I think that's all I can say about this one. IT was just so mesmerizing and mystical! It was truely amazing. The rhyme scheme wasn't really concrete...but it still made the poem flow flawlessly. Who needs a rhyme pattern...psssh! Well this poem is great..I don't know how much more I can say that. Best of luck in the contest!
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I loved the mystical, magical feel to this piece. A lovely story and very enjoyable to read. Best of luck to you in the competition.
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beautiful metaphor for stars! (correct me if ive interprited it wrong) its nice to read a happy poem, theres so many sad depresing poems it stars to get to you, this one made me smile
cheers
B&P -
raspberry---I think this is one of the sweetest and prettiest poems I've read here on AP, Truly amazing, and everything about it is just perfect--it's really beautiful. I wish you luck in the contest with this fine entry
Shaz xx
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AWESOME
A delicious feast to feed upon this day my friend. Each sestet flows wonderfully in meter and rhyme!
And you already know I love the title! Triple platinum applause!
Best wishes! Sandi
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such a soft peaceful poem. i could put myself to sleep with it.. in a VERY good way. i hope you don't mind me saying. very very nice.
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Very nice piece !
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I loved how old fashioned this seemed and the imagery and metaphors you used was awesome. The flow was really nice the rhyming was good an dI think you did an awesome job on this. Good luck in your contest!
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This is really beautiful and wonderful approach on fairies. I really like the idea of the Queen told them a story then set them to a task.
Nice rhyme and flow (though it was irregular) and lovely choice of words too!
Keep on writing and good luck in the contest.
Nooni
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A wonderful write so inspiring and magical the picture is so lovely it makes me want to read more thank you so much for sharing and giveing me a time in my day to smile
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A delightful tale. The world can certainly use those smiles. Beautifully written. ~ Sue
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Very Good
Well written. It has the amazing magical flair which sends our minds into auto-pilot.
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An amazing piece. It is an amazing read. It flows, it tells the story so beautifully. thank you for it. -
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A sweet sweet write. Fairy kisses are freckles right? Got a few in the night when I was young. Don't see them anymore,...fairies that is...got the freckles still! Your write is as wonderful as you are, Raspberry, thanks for sharing this wonder with us. Walt.
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Fantasy and beautiful. This is a great write!
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paints a lovely tail, very good
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raspberry what a wonderful poem to close this contest.I was totally wrapped up in this piece I do so like a poem that weaves a story through it. And this you have done so well (as Ever) Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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A beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing Sandy
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Beautiful
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This is such a beautiful poem. Very well written. I enjoyed so much reading this. I can tell a person's heart by the way they write. You must have a beautiful heart. Thank you for sharing your words. Great job.
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Beautiful, simply wonderful. It was filled with lots of imagery and it was full of fantasy. I like your style in this piece, it's very musical, and I like that you hinted to them being the stars throughout the poem, very good, keep it up!
~Diverse One~
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Beautiful! Absolutely Beautiful! Lovely and Mystical, very enjoyable read.
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Oh wow. This is so brilliant. such a lovely concept, beautifully penned.
good Job
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fanciful and with an unusual rhyme scheme, definitely through the reader from feeling an forced wording. Good poem raspberry and quite astronomical.LOL
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