A Promise of Love served
on a bamboo skewer
with Temptations of Eternity-
Our flesh sewn together...
Dangled from a silk string,
thin line of Remembrance...
-Side to Side-
Hypnotic to the eyes...
An hourglass of golden sand
on shores of Paradise,
under matching umbrellas
with chilled margaritas
plus curly straws...
...The essence of Us...
Contract signed in Spirit,
self as witness
buried in a time capsule
for our future children to dig up...
We became a force of One-
In our own playground...
This sacred place spoken
only amongst ourselves...
[ Our sacred ground was desecrated ]
Strewn remnants of my Soul
decorated the swollen earth
along with the pre-mature
eulogy and epitaph
Someone wrote on me...
...A Joke which no one found funny...
Our playground burned
to the ground-
A pact of Lies
and Love questioned...
He stood in the middle
of Hell's wrath-
The other part of me
scorched...
...The Jokester watched him incinerate...
.
.
.
A Promise of Love severed
with the skewer, sharpened-
Stuck in my Heart
and expectations of togetherness
pulled apart at the seams...
-- Scar over left bosom --
Choked from the thin line
to remember each moment...
- Front and Back -
Blinded by the glare
magnified off an hourglass shard...
The golden sands turned to dust
on shores of Paradise lost,
over matching umbrellas, shredded-
under broken margarita glasses
and split curly straws...
{ Where the Heart of me is buried }
Author notes
Tenses done with intent...
Chose Option 2-Deadly Romance...
Written August 25th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- †Word Bank/Titles Contest† by OurxBeginning.
306 points, ended September 2, 2006, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is very interesting..and I liked how it went from light to dark and the picture is really beautiful. Your write came to life in my mind. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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excellent
Ah, what a great poem. It flows through the mind so eloquently. Very ripping at the emotions. Good luck in the contest. -
this is a wonderful write. A comment this late is hard especially when you follow so many other good comments. But i enjoyed the story line & the flow making the message easy to comprehend. Thankx for sharing.
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this is fucking incredible. WOW. I am definitely bookmarking this.
shit. i don't know what else to say...and that only happens with really good poems...so consider this the most sincere form of a compliment. -
A for Awesum..;o)
WWWWOWWWWW....You write from a place not many can access as easily as you do...
To shift gears into high and drive the car into a brick wall is painful enough in life's experience to do the play by play you do here...
SEARINGLY... beautifully... etched...in blood..LoL...
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A+
Beautiful and sad, and the picture carries it dramatically. I could read this over and over again. It was an awesome write, and I will give this an applause. -
You made curly straws sound so depressing... :'[
I love this poem, it's very good. -
Excellant/romantic/sad
Wow, a very intense, and unique write/read. i like it just the way it is. -
Appreciate your visit Reenie and I am honored to inhale and learn from your Masterpieces!
I Love your style and Poetic Presence as I call it
Thanks for your Sweet words!!
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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dang you girl....this started so beautifully romantic ( i was joining you for that Margarita) and then it became dark and sad. Great diction as well as a chilling stry/poem this tells, and you have raised the bar for this contest
I am always pleased to be in a competition with such worthy writers. Win or loose really does not matter...I enjoy the reads Best wishes sweetie and much love,
reenie
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sweet and bitter, skillfully done
Whoa!!!
- my heart sung , my heart sank 
...job done! ...job very well done!!!
if it were you and me under that margarita tree
silky white sand and balmy, soft breeze
there would be no second half of shards and dreams broken
just soft, wet kisses and sweet everythings spoken
...................for my sweet Desire...by her little lion.
and much love.................Lionslove
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Kewl write, my friend! I wish you all the best!
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