My night-heart is ice-cruel and deepest black;
The eldritch curtain of the deathly sky
Curselike swathes my gloomy land of hate-dreams.
My soul lies buried in a well of searing pain,
All hope of love and emotion gone, empty, void.
My heart and soul stink like the foullest pus
Oozing from the ugly suppurating sore
That is my cancerous revengeful mind.
My heart beats coldly, I feel it pounding
Relentlessly in my breast, feeding on my seething hatred.
My restless mind revels in its deep loathing
Of your unending foulness and your deceptions.
The only reason I can bear to survive another day
Is the eager prospect of your dire suffering,
When the time is ripe for radiant vengeance,
When I drive hot nails of joy through your eyes.
My tongue cleaves to my palate in semi-sleep
As I dream-relish your exquisite death agonies.
And when the bleak, cheerless dawn breaks and I awake
To find you lying there beside me still,
The wind, cold wind, a breath of noisome ice,
Rattles my soul’s windows and chills my heart.
It takes all my strength to hold back my lust
To rip the sleeping throat from your body.
Author notes
Written August 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Macabre Medicines! by Lost Vampyre Angel.
1200 points, ended August 24, 52 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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O.O wow this is amazing, in detail and with such a poetic darkness and flow, now i cant write anything without having a compulsive disorder to rhyme but this flowed without rhythm which is something new to me, and this write is amazing dear, best of luck in the contest,
dark blessings,
kitty xxx -
Edna got a bit wicked here. She sometimes finds her whore moans.
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I'm frankly quite fucking scared! here, have an applause and remember who your friends on here are!
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very goo
when you seek revenge
you dig two holes
i guess, a poem about it
is much better
very detailed
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a plotter's dream -
this poem is so much better than the last one i read by you. the ending line, well, i guess it would be the last line...was so perfect it's sick. this poem is so full of hate. ack. i love it. lol there's no other way to put it, other than love. it's so powerful. just all the words you used, and then the ending was magnificent. great job, keep up the good work!
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Deep!
woahhhhhhhhhh this was incredible...well very much best of luck to you in this contest this gave me chills I loved it!
Kari -
W RITE ONN !!
DAYAM... Freddy Kruger style!!!
I guess they say all is fair in love and war...LoL..
I agree it would be a diisturbing dream to wake up and your throat torn out..
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Sweetly vengeful and nicely graphic - remind me never to sleep with you
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You are first off a poet of exquisite talent. I am always amazed at your talent and stunned by your subject matter. Glad it is just a poem.
This is by far meets all the requirements of the contest. My best to you in this competition, my friend? lol
Jim
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Poetic Justice - well spoken!
Ah, Edna... I abso-posolutely LOVE it!! Reminds me of my yesteryear - a time I was completely emotionless, and on hateful vengeance! Even now, this gives me that nostalgic feeling - missing it. At times, I honestly wish I could still have that emotion to pursue a better career than what I have. I think I will bookmark it - as a reminder of the potential of raw hatred that you express that is human nature at its finest! -
It's a poem. It's not real. Well maybe. Maybe I'd like to slit that throat I see throbbing on the other pillow.
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angry
okay lets put the guns down ,pull up a chair and all calm down and have a drink.we can talk this over.nobody has to go to jail.nobody has to die.everythings gonna be just fine.take a deep breath and count to ten.if that doesnt work please try it again.if that doesnt work perhaps try a third.wait you have no ice and warm vodkas absurd.do you perhaps have another type of liquor?this is all overtime for me so im not interested in quicker.good times -
Revenge is a meal best served cold, bitter and oh so passionatly! This is a remarkable job you have made of this piece and it is quite unique compared to a lot of hate/revenge poems that i have seen. Awesome write with so much emotion and spirit. Keep on penning,
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Brilliant. Powerful, blunt, poetic. I loved it. The last stanza is the best, I think.
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Hell hatn no fury like a woman scorned. Well done Edna.
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Good, hate poem Edna, but couldn't you have just left this person? But then - revenge is sweet!
Ann
Edited on Aug 30, 11:25 because ''.
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