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Sky Poetry





The sky is purplegrey tonight
like the colours layered
in their faces.

They troll in and out-
around the corridors
waiting in turn.

for the remedy!

the pill!

smoothed out lines
of withdrawals to ffffade
slow    ly             a w a y



And they all see it
the sky-
through the detox office window
where they watch.


the city s pills      up and down
and the chimney pots
play charades
with their minds


[guess who's coming
to dinner tonight
who wants supper
did you sleep today?]


                                   Nurse; fetch the pills and potions
                                            lotions and alternatives



                       where are you, it's dark in here?





Anything, is better than looking
like the same colour as the sky







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night shift ramblings
Written September 6th, 2006

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  • Gods child40
    September 15, 2006
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    I love your homepage, it's awesome!!
  • Catharsis
    September 8, 2006
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    Yes a shift is all this and more besides. You have captured a great atmosphere in this piece. Robi

  • queenie
    September 7, 2006
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    although i basically like anything you write,it's these musings you create about your job that intrigues me the most.it's such an awesome talent to be able to gi into the recesses of your mind and come out with the reality depicting a situation and put it into a poetic form.your musings has a way of drawing one in and letting them be where you are.this is truly great.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 7, 2006
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    I wish there were some pills sometimes, special magic pills...

    but reality is so much better. Sorry sarcasm is my mood.

    This is fabulous Gill, you always are and you are inspiring. Thank you for that. I wanted to enter the contest for you but my words have been fumbling lately and I am just a bit lost -

    just know that I respect you and hold you in such high regard. You are a wonder my dear.

  • ariosto silver member
    September 6, 2006
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    Your poem reminds me of an Ivan Albright painting...
    www.tfaoi.com/newsmu/nmus40b.htm
    for example.

    Quite an ambience you've created

  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    these places remind me of pallor inside and out (hopeless sort of) You did a great job at recounting yet another shift on your job and I admire you ( for your poetic skills of course) but just as much for what you do to possibly bring a bit of cheer to someones life , for I can picture you always having a smile and/or a cheery word for all
    much love always,
    reenie

  • Zayra Yves gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    I love this Gill. But for some reason on my computer the baby blue color is too baby blue on the purple and hard for me to read without highlighting. Anyway, it is lovely.

  • ca ne fait rien
    September 6, 2006
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    The clouds look like veins waiting sometimes through our window, Gill. I guess it is like watching a waterfall when you need to pee. You capture such bursting tensions in here.

  • Danna Hobart
    September 6, 2006
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    Sounds like a long night. The pills sound pretty good though
    Do you have to be in detox to get some of those?













    Just kidding, of course

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    thanks Elaine...

    glad you could stop on by

  • misselaineous gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    a fine musing gill
    you captured the pallor so well

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    Nooooo... I forgot... duh!! silly me



    thanks Suzi

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    ehhehehhe

    yes yes very cute.. and no... you only get the fluorescent green pill that fizzes and explodes on your tongue



    thanks hun .. be well and take care


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    thankyou Jess

    as always.. lovely lovely

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    hahahahha

    okay... POINT TAKEN GIRLIE GIRL... will do


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    thank you so much


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    I also work in a combined unit.. both drugs and alcohol.. been a nurse 26yrs..

    how about you?

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    hehehehehh

    well thankie Miss Gina... glad you enjoyed the feast of words ..LOLOLOL

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    ahh many thanks Yvette... glad you took time to read it

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    thanks

    glad you dropped on by

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    thank you so much, your words touched me

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    I felt like that at work yesterday Just wayyyy too much rain this last week.

    You need to bring your camera to work and get a picture of that window

    I can see them floating around zombie-like. Well done Gilly

  • cafegroundzero silver member
    September 6, 2006
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    Thank Goddess for nurses

    Nurse! Nuuuuurrrse! Please come quick!

    Give me the red pill, please!

    No, the blue one.

    Oh, which one Izzzz it? I can't. make. up. my. mind!

    Arrggghhhhh!



    Sorry, look. Please accept my... I don't know what. you nurses are amazing.

    Here, please:

  • -ButterflyCuts-
    September 6, 2006
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    Ah but the sky is beautiful..

    A lovely piece, it was tender while at the same time quite haunting.

    Lovely write drawing on your experiences. ALl my love
    jess

  • Dalaney gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    Girl...you are just hell bent on destroying what eyesight I have left. Okay, so I had my nose PRESSED HARD up against my computer screen (blink blink) but I suppose inhaling a pound of dust was worth the read. Lo and Behold! A remarkable poem came into view! You are one of my favorites, Gill, but unless you want me to WRITE MY NEXT TEN POEMS IN CAPS, please think of me when using gray font on lavender backgrounds
    Love,
    Lane PS: How long have you been writing poetry? Your talent is awesome.

  • orionrising
    September 6, 2006
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    I love the sense of individuality breaking free of society colours and boring day to day belief. The depth is great. Thank you for sharing your poem

  • mjseattle silver member
    September 6, 2006
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    I work in a drug and alcohol treatment center. You really bring the scene alive. I can relate to your poem. Good job.

  • Emerald13
    September 6, 2006
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    you are a veritable fountain of ramblings that are great poetry ... that something authentic bourne of experience .... (perhaps that is the haiku in me ?) ... i do so enjoy your ramblings >>> GINA
  • Yvette Champ
    September 6, 2006
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    A write which was demonstrative,ingenious usage of "city s pills" at first thought you had a keyboard error as tired then realized it may be intentional play on city's pills and city spills.Well done indeed

  • truckingpain
    September 6, 2006
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    Very well written in my opinion... I think it is a powerful message being sent.. Tastefully

  • Angel2Write2474U
    September 6, 2006
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    I love this... the way you used the fffade idea was smart, as you fffade away into the distance in your mind too, working the graveyard shift, it sounds... I am a School Bus driver, and writing does come at opportune times. I will be back to read this again. I love your chosen words and purple sky....Ahhhhhhh- Purple my favorite color. Spiritual and Warm! Have a great and inspirational day! Keep Writing, your writing to me, is smooooth! as silk. I am new at commenting, if I make a mistake- Ooops, sorry!
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