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Gin & Tequila



Dimmed images

hint at

not often enoughs,

while secret smiles

reveal little to remember.

A hint of gin

 still lingers on my skin,

             shaken with a twist of lime.

Contradictions

  of

a self centered Virgo,

             in her delusion

of a Scorpio lacking emotion,

                           falls short of understanding.

Leaning away

in surrender

                  of

                     hallelujahs

       engrained in flashes

       of what

        could have happened,

                        and the taste of

                    your sweet honey suckle

                        is stained

                               bitter on my

                      slurred words,

                            inspired after

                   another hazy tequila sunrise.

                                             

Author notes

this is a poem I wrote about a year ago and I think its one of my favs.
Written September 16th, 2006

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  • DreamProwler
    April 8, 2007
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    it makes my skin crawl.
    Was that intended?

  • Venessa
    September 23, 2006
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    There is always enough booze in my home you are welcome anytime
  • ian sawicki
    September 23, 2006
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    booze, i simply can't get enough of it got any spare? ah waht ifs, i suppsoe life is full fo those, it could have ben like so or so. a good piece, nicely written. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

  • WildFlame03
    September 20, 2006
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    awesome

    This was really good. Tequila is one hell of a liquor, and for you to write about it was awesome.

  • ImNoGoddess
    September 20, 2006
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    I've always been amazed at the complexity of this type of poetry, as the words are always very simple...the meaning and arrangement are the key depth. Oh, but the drunken world is quite a juxtaposition to the sober and much more interesting. I like this piece. -Raviyn

  • Varkatzas
    September 20, 2006
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    what the...

    i read this and i was dumbstruck, like "what the hell just happened, did i just get laid?" but i guess that is an accurate portrayal of gin and tokillya

  • Autumn Escura
    September 20, 2006
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    Wow. I loved this piece. The imagery is amazing and the flow is unforced. The form is very fitting to the poem. It shows emotion and it holds meaning. You've got me wishing I had some tequila.... I could really use it right now.

    Keep penning!

    Shadow of an Angel

  • Dalaney gold member
    September 20, 2006
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    I can see why it's one of your favorites. Just love the last stanza - Perfect ending to a great poem. Thanks for posting this.
    Lane

  • onesongglorygurl
    September 20, 2006
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    Wow! love it! it's so beautiful! I especially love the descriptions you used. Great write!
  • Striders Bar - silver member
    September 20, 2006
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    Superb/romantic/unique

    A cool and fun write, I enjoyed it just as it is.
  • femurlee
    September 20, 2006
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    Awesome

    This poem takes me back to those days of tequila sunrises -- with or without blended roses. You'd have to read one of my old poems. Great imagery. Peace.

  • Always Deena
    September 17, 2006
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    I love this,rings familiar with my past. Its so great to be reading you again. I missed you.
    Love,
    Deena

  • Aurielle
    September 16, 2006
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    WOW BEAUTIFUL I have no points though.

  • blueyez
    September 16, 2006
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    This is an awesome write! I really really liked it! I shall bookmark it!

  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 16, 2006
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    been there done that now i drink a little before my workouts so my body doesnt really know whats happening ha
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