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Who Is He? (The Vampire Lestat)


Oh, such a pretty face,
A beauty without disgrace.
His eyes penetrate;
Oh to be in his embrace.


Why do I want to drown?
Why do I long to fall?
When I know he is evil;
He will my soul enthral!


If I leave, I escape his spell.
But if I leave, I will see my Hell.


I am a man of words and ideals;
I don’t believe in them.
It’s not reality;
Vampires can’t exist,
Oh to be able to condemn.


If I leave, I escape his spell.
But if I leave, I will see my Hell.


Who is he?

This creature of infinitive darkness,
This beauty that comes and brings me to madness?
The eyes that absorb every shade,
This beauty that I can’t escape.

Who is he?

Does it make sense for me to fall again?
Why do I feel like I am dying again?
Should I fall into temptation?
Why must I go in desperation?

Who is he?

Why do I wish to drown in his kiss again?
Why does his touch makes my heart burn again?
I write for truth, no one can deny!
Why must I ache for his reply?
It makes no sense in logical world!
And yet his touch left me unfurled…


Who is he?

Who is he?

The Vampire Lestat!


Oh, Daniel, you fool of lie!
I know it will be by his hand that I die!

Who is he?

Vampire Lestat!


Author notes

Option 3 and 4...Musical: Lestat. Character p.o.v. Daniel Malloy. The melody is from 'Who am I?' from Les Miserables...since I am not a musician in any sense of the word, this can't possibly be good...however, I loved doing it  A bit of fun with some great characters, like Daniel's fascination with Lestat even if (ironically) he never really meets him until he is turned by Marius. And yet, Daniel would always carry a torch for Lestat, not for Marius. Sigh.
Written September 20th, 2006

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  • Amber Rose
    September 20, 2006
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    wow! thats freakin awesome! i love the wording! it makes me think of a face with eyes like the stars and skin as white as snow. that movie was cool too. great powm!

  • CBminstrel
    September 20, 2006
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    LOL Oh now I see this contest really was a great idea, because I'm already having fun! I loved this! I liked the merging of the options as well, it worked! Poor Daniel....tortured and yet loved it...and that's what you managed to get across in this, with such compelling lyrics! Poetic, yet good for singing, and you fit the melody well! All singable...perhaps I'll sing it one day for fun ;-) LOL Great entry...I'm glad you had fun writing it, because I had fun reading it! LOL

  • Amber Danielle
    September 20, 2006
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    I thought that this was an excellent piece, the only thing I was thinking (since you did ask for a critical review) is that in line 8 It would fit better to say my soul, he will enthrall, as opposed to he will my soul enthrall. But I think that this deserves an applause as your flow was smooth and I loved the piece. Blessed Be and Merry Part

  • Reckless.Emotions
    September 20, 2006
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    hey
    wow such a new peice of writting from you. I didnt think it was your best work, but i thought you did a fabulous job. Keep it up.
    Chloe<3

  • Allure of a Rose
    September 20, 2006
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    Lol. Most think I would have, and some even compare my work to hers; I just haven't got around to it. I've been really busy, spending a lot of time out of state with the band and stuff. Plus, most of my free time is devoted to my love-slave. You're most welcome.

    -Allura

  • BrokenFiend
    September 20, 2006
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    I am rather surprised. You always struck me as someone who would have read Anne Rice Thanks for the comment!

  • Allure of a Rose
    September 20, 2006
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    I have no clue who these characters are or the melody/rhythm of that song (I only ever watched Les Miserable as a movie, with Liam Neeson [spelling] in it), but you did a great job. I loved, well... all of it. Sorry if I go off on a little bunny trail here, when I'm tired my thought trains are rather, scattered and soon to be obliviated.

    In the first stanza, line 3 you need to take the "s" off of "penetrates."
    The forth part of the write doesn't seem to make sense, I'm not sure what you lack, but "Vampires can’t exist,
    Oh to able to condemn," isn't quite making sense. Perhaps, "Oh to be able to condemn." Those are the most prominent errors, a few more spots are "iffy."

    Back to the quality of it, I fucking love it, honey. Your passion is great.

    EnticingWishesAndBloodiedKisses

    -Allura
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