He had paused not, at the sunset sky
Nor has he seen the stars shine at night,
The indwelt magic had swept his eye
Hiding deep were the beauties from sight.
But the screen unveiled with utmost grace
Revealing thy bliss in devout cheer,
For once, he saw blessed nature's face
To his heart he held, the scene so dear.
When he saw her first, 'midst the seas
The voice of breeze in murmurs behind,
Thy rhythm of music, he drank with ease
And saw the charm of Ecstasy unwind.
Kissed by the glow from the moonlit skies
Blessed with charm from the deep sea's blue,
Chased and embraced by the pearls in guise
While clouds gave birth, in the seas she grew.
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Written October 5th, 2006
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Very nice with a picture that enhances your beautiful poem. My best to you with this entry.
Jim -
This is cool. It sounds like something you write if you were on Ectasy. All colorful and Sikadellic. I don't know if I spelled that right. I really loved the imagery.
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Resounding is majestic love......magical as much myth can love take the solice soul to bliss....this to me inscribes the magic of love found reflective of vast oceans and wondrous skies......falling upon waking hearts to loneliness lives....I see an exquisitry to this writing....as much the pen of this poet.......you have sent my imaginations to more vivid stellars glow......beautifully done and illustrated........
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Malabu -
Wonderful, wonderful and more wonderful still.
Beautiful descriptions and lovely flow and metre. Thank you so much for sharing. 
~Elora~ -
I loved this magical poem, you too took me aeway for awhile.. keep penning, good luck in this contest..MM
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The words just sort of 'wash' over the reader. Well done, and good luck!
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I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing.
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I would just like to add to my previous comment, that, although this was probably my shortest comment here in this contest, your poem is one of my absolute favorites. I just don't have many words to express this to you, but maybe it doesn't need many words, and your soul will understand my appreciation through silence.
much love,
maa -
A Blessed Work
Like the sea, this poem has an allure and a mystery that dazzles. I love poems of this sort, where the questions asked leave the reader to answer.
There is a subtle depth to this that I sincerely hope all who read it find. You have a ocean-heart and it shows.
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what an incredibly graceful poem you have offered us here, raspberry ! I was enchanted from the first to the last line ... thank you so much.
maa -
Wow. This truly is a beauty. What a delight and a pleasure to read such fine verse. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pam
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raspberry---you always pen such beautiful words, and this work is no exception. It's truly gorgeous!, the last stanza is simple stunning with a wonderful ending. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Shaz xx
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this is almost mythical like the tales told of mermaids rescuing sailors, but there are many true words written as myths, you have portrayed the beauty of nature within this poem, mans desire to tame the wild untamable sea, and mans single mindedness is pursuit of his desires, wonderfully written fantasy poem which carries one off on a magic carpet ride, well done, Broad
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FANTASTIC WRITING
I THINK THAT THIS PIECE YOU HAVE WROTE HERE, IS BEAUTIFUL. YOUR WORDS FLOW INTO ANOTHER WORLD. THE READER IS TAKEN AWAY FROM THE WORLD HE KNOWS. YOU TRANSPORT THE READER'S MIND TO ANOTHER REALM. FANTASTIC WRITING. -
Very impressive, a magnetic feel of ebb and flow, a mystical Dream...Anyway I loved it too..Best wishes Paul
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I can see the picture before me...full of color and sight and sound. Beautifully done. Excellent piece of poetry. Write on, poet.
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Truly a beautifully descriptive write! The flow throughout these lines is impeccable. You expressed the raw elegance of the sea with a stunning use of vocabulary. Wonderful rhyme and wonderful rhythm. Very nicely done!
~Lori~ -
Raspberry there is little I can say that i have not already said about your work.Always wonderfully descriptive with fine use of the right words A beautiful feel to the poem and a pleasure to read as always Thank you for entering and Good luck in the contest
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Wonderful poem
This is really really good. Fantastic writing. The flow is brilliant as well. Much luck in this contest. You have got a great chance. -
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You have a wonderful way with words, sounds delicate and colorful, Raspberry, like your name. I really enjoyed the last stanza.
"Kissed by the glow from the moonlit skies
Blessed with charm from the deep sea's blue,
Chased and embraced by the pearls in guise
While clouds gave birth, in the seas she grew."
I like the verb sequence: kissed, blessed, chased, embraced, gave birth, and the title: "in the seas she grew." A very nice arrangement of thought, idea, and expression.
Well done.
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Love the picture. This poem is a great way to bring in the reader.
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once again, i thoroughly enjoyed your work. i have not been on the site in a while but i recognise both your name and the style - which is always the mark of an artist.
excellent work and very good luck in the contest -
Wow. This piece is so beautiful. I love it with my whole heart. I live near the Sea, less then 5 minutes walk from it to be exact. I visit daily to the rocks. The ocean is purely beautiful. I really enjoyed that poem, it gives me the same feeling as when I watch the waves roll in. Thanks for sharing.
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