To Sue
Sporadic moments of longing,
Marred with emotions untold,
Leaving me endlessly wishing,
A swap, for a heart stone cold.
Desperate and desolate I lie,
Praying for perpetual darkness,
To what purpose? An answer I deny,
Myself. Hurt by an act so larcenous.
Lost my love to another, so undeserving,
Feelings of sadness and hate, so undying,
In need of something to hold on to, strong,
Through the journey of life, inevitably long.
Hope you offered me, my Angel.
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Hey Sue,
Might not have told you before, but I've always believed that you are my angel for innumerable reasons, one being that you understand what I feel for her better than her, other being you've always been there to offer hope and advice, last being that I have this intense feeling that YOU will be one important reason why me and she would be together. Love ya lots sis!
PS: Cheesy?? I know! Couldn't help it!
Written October 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- That's why I call you my Angel by blakdiamone.
300 points, ended October 9, 2006, 8 entries
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Very nicely written, Longing and Love entwined equally to good effect, keep rhyming it does you justice methinks...Write on and Live...Scott -
You are so stingy with words! Hmmm... neway it does convey the msg! Rokkkkkkk on! Banana banana banana terracota banana terracota terracota pie!
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...im speechless... for once in my entire crazy existence, im absolutely speechless...
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Whoa! That was quick! Thanks for the comment fairymother!
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Lovely poem for Sue, Dumbkiwaniwinkydodo! A combination of outpouring of your emotions and thank-you to Sue for being there for you. Nutty Fairymother
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Duh! Twas my pleasure! And hey... thanks a ton for your comment.. and thanks another ton for the fact this is my first write where I rhyme.. I usually prefer free verse.. The whole idea behind the contest was too good that I ditched free verse this once! Hehe! Thanks again! Rock on!
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I like that. I'm liking the fact that you followed the rules. Thanks for the entry.
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