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three dimensions of our minds

Number1

The silence pales,as we dawn on a new time in the winds crying of forgiveness.

Number2

The blossoms call sweetly as honeybees surround theforbidden fruits of us

Number3

Depressed dreams of solitude for a lost answer in the moons eye

Number5

shadows of past stalk the days of butterflies glory in the wings of deciet

Number6

Echoes torturing the heart at a distance as snow blends with the ghosts of past

Number 7

Dimensions of  time escalades through seconds of dreams of invisibility

Number 8

Dragons crawl from the mists to stand elusively by as the darkness encrouches upon us.

Number 9
Fires flood the anxious tears of walls imprisoned

Number 11
Cursed for flaws written in thoughts of the tortured

Number 12
Through depths of the dragons wounds,small light stands before the tears of those left behind with crystal hearts shattered.

Number 13
Whispers of sanctuary as the truth lies bare on the hearts of lost loves

Number14
Moonlight becomes you

Clouds hidden as paths open for us to choose among the lost

Number 15
Desperately seeing what the dream was as shadows cry for old pages written in our minds
Number16
Milky stars shine as the pain of the past is peeled by crows to show us our true selves

number 17
Calmness of tears as the solitude creeps between the shadows of being sole.



Author notes

Try to think beyond what you have been taught to think,reach outward to the point of the exterior of your thoughts.
Written November 11th, 2006

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  • DancingWithDarkness
    November 18, 2006
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    i like this but can it be clasified as a poem, oh well i love this because it sent such vivied pictures in my mind from the sentences you wrote. c-ya and keep writing and having good ideas.


  • Tattboy silver member
    November 13, 2006
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    VERY interesting. Not a piece that makes it easy on the reader (and I like that). It makes you consider each thought alone, in its' entirety, and then how they fit together.

    Incidentally, is there a reason that there is no Number 4 or Number 10?

    You have a way of really making the reader think, thank you.