My Promise
My promise now is the same as I said back then
To love you totally with emotions all un-penned
Even now in my lifes' sweet & tender September
You are the most precious one I always remember
For of your heart & soul my memories go far back
Before the awakening of my escape from the black
I have seen much wonder and awe in this new life
Enjoyed days by a silent brook~then days in strife
The hard knots of my heart you melted like butter
And as for lovely....well God, you make me stutter
What you did for my heart and soul was a wonder
That voice shook me deep inside like God's thunder
Who is the first I think of when I do arise or go sleep
It is you riding the waves of my inner emotions deep
Thus if you think I'll just up and give you my regards
My Darling, realize its you that holds the trump cards
JD
Author notes
to Margi
Written November 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- true friendship by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 28, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Wow! a very heart warming write to the love you love and deserves your love, for you have a very pure, gentle and a caring heart. My best line is the first line of the last verse: about the first to be thought about when u rise or sleep, its like my line, my life. This is truly something you and your loved one will forever cherish. Thanks for sharing this most beautiful write with us.
Love and light,
Lencio
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The Silver trophy was well-deserved...like a lemon cupcake.
"as I said back then"
Powerful, with a side of cheesy. (:
"emotions all un-penned"
Well, that's kinda clever.
"a silent brook"
PRETTTTYTTYTYTYT<--intentional typo, but I mean it (:
Congratulations again on your Silver
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Congrats on the silver trophy. I'm sorry it took me awhile to read and comment this. But of course I was entranced by it! It's understandable how this is your favorite... the feelings you express in this are so strong and passionate.
You are lucky to have such certainty about your relationship with this person. Very well done.
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This is most lovely for your friend Len, after meeting her I can well understand what you told me of her. She has a beautiful spirit in the highest sense. But, she might not always hold the trump cards no???
love
Chloe
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Well this what the love is...a joy ..a completeness and the music of life..you are true and very deep revealing the the basics of the love which are the eternal parts and eternal definations of love..you did a wonderul job here Thank you so much for sharing a beautiful poem..well done...
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Ahhhh the throes of true love, never a smooth ride in getting there but as long as the destination is reach with hearts in tact, no going back
Lovely JD
Karen
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Thus if you think I'll just up and give you my regards
My Darling, realize its you that holds the trump cards
a universal thought...I love the immagery of this
write...a heart warming work is here..Indeed a beautiful poem..Thanks for the entry in my contest...
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Aww beautiful ..An amazing dedication..Im sure she loves this...as do I...
Best wishes with this entry..
Peace
~A~
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Excellent
A very good take on the prompt. My favourite lines:
"The hard knots of my heart you melted like butter
And as for lovely....well God you make me stutter"
Congrats, and best regards for the contest
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This is a lovely rendition of your heart given to this woman, though I do not know her, I think it is good hearted and she must be very special for you to be so giving with the beautiful words to her soul, thank you for sharing
Gander.
warms my heart be happy to have touched another soul.
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The hard knots of my heart...O' my this is just lovely my Brother
what a way to say you care...She is so lucky to have you
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Very nice poem and again I can very much relate to this piece!You are a very good artist,keep up the great work
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Absolutely gorgeous and I bet she is tickled silly...your true loyalty, devotion and faithfulness coupled with the deep love is outright fantabulous here..My fav line ..."It is you riding the waves of my inner emotions deep." what a lovely sentiment..Am so honored to read this & thank her from me...God knows where you would be.....
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This was a wonderful penning, your spirit rests within the lines adn your emotions reach the reader, nice way to lift the "sigh" at the end My pleasure to read ~Tia
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Gorgeous out pouring of emotion...lovely underlying tone in this.
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A nice piece. The ending is a little funny. The phrasing didn't seem as breathtaking to me.
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What lovely sentiments you have expressed so well in these lines - easy to read and understand. Cute ending for this poem - great picture to accompany it as well. Thanks for sending this one to me.
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Well done! Your flow and structure is good adding to the image. An image that is pure love. I know she will love this. Your poetry was good but is getting better all the time.
Love,
Amera
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yes indeed, love her bunches
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wow, I was just reading all your comments on this poem and I can't seem to find anything more pleasing to say than the fact that I find this piece to be quite nice, dreamy... everyone has said everything else lol... well done, well done
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Your love shines out like the sun!
Or maybe a volcano erupting...
Or a river flooding, or a fire raging or a whole zoo full of animals escaping! Or a whole jelly bean factory exploding! 
OR, a big tsunami of chocolate syrup flowing over the country! 
A BEAUTIFUL poem!
YES!
Melodies
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A lovely sentimental piece that just gives the heartstrings a good old yank. well done, an enjoyable read.
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stunning
I think that you let your heart out in this one! I am amazed at the love that poured out to share with your loved one, thank you for sharing it with us. I wish you the best in life all the good and considerable less strife. Love is the one thing people yearn for, yet they don't realize it is within arms reach.
This poem is LOVELY!
Always,
Summer Rayne
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beautiful heartfelt emotion packed poem
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How what a sweet language you have. Your words made me sigh! No surprise this is one of your favorite. I am so glad to come across your page today.
Thank you for gifting us such romantic feeling :-)
~Massy~
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Daddy darling
You are where I
cannot see with eye
but know one day
I will and may.
Now is your time
to know love sublime
you deserve it most
you best of hosts.
Smoosh
Janet
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love this poem you are an amazing writer I love it.
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How very beautiful this is! Sigh....
Your heart speaks loud and true, my friend! I loved this! Thank you so much for sharing this with me and I wish you all the best...always! -
just lovely...i mean it. Send me more links when you can...This is truly a wonderful write. Love, Lane
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wow, what a nice poem. its about marriage right? it reminds me of my marriage. very lovely. wonderful. voundevar
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I love the stuttering part, it reminds me of someone very dear to my heart!
Effortless rhyme with led to a great flow! Love it! Absolutely beautiful
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good
hi i thought your poem was real good and very nice to read loved all the emotions put into it
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wow
I absolutely loved this poem. It almost made me cry when i was reading it. It reminds me of myself once before. I am so unbelievably happy for you that you found love. It is an amazing this that shouldn't be taken for granted and I can see that you haven't taken it for granted. I wish the two of you so many happy days and a healthy relationship. -
Very good...
I would say go "to" sleep
as my last sigh or peep
yet your feelings cannot be denied
with feelings building, softly cried.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari -
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My heart penned this poem for it was not of conscious thought. Some things cannot be penned, only 'felt', as you know all too well my brother.
Peace
JD
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Love poems that arent so overly dramatic and unrealisitc are instead very cute. Sadly, most love poems get caught up on the sap and end up sounding more like a 13 year olds infatuation. I appreciate yours becuase it is none of that, it isnt full of hollow cliche phrases or romeo and juliet quotes. Instead it veers toward sincerity. That might just be my mind jibberish, but regradless... it's cute. And I appreciate that about it.
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tear.......
beautifully written. your words hit rite down to the heart. your wife is lucky to have such a gifted writer. keep up the good work.
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Ok so here is my face lol..I have read this one. And adored it. Hello there lol.
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OMG this is so beautiful!
This is absolutely beautiful!! Really wonderfully written throughout and so so heartfelt! I could totally relate to what you were saying! Thanks so so much for entering and good luck in the contest!
Thanks
Blissful Princess
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Breathtaking
For of your heart & soul my memories go far back
Before the awakening of my escape from the black"
This was my favorite part...and it was hard to even chose. But it hit me with, 'my escape from the black'.
How many times the ebony cloak enfolds us, not allowing to see anything but.
This made me remember, a love once had. How foreign it seems to me now. This lovely piece makes me want to wish it back.
Magnificent.
Lady Blue~
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OH, every lady poet who reads this...
will hope you wrote it for HER! You clever scamp, you! You have captured the heart of every woman who has come to know you, including mine, for I think of you as my special poet time traveler.
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stunning
VEry heart renching poem beautifully written loved
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sweet
Is Margi Stormy?
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Beautiful straightforward verses, whoever is the lady I am sure she enjoyed this love poem
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Lovely
This is so sweet and romantic. Having been married for a mere 31 years, I enjoy romance from a mature point of view. Line #15 is by far my favorite, original and adorable. Well, line #13 is a close runner up Thanks for a wonderful read and an inspiring mood as I get ready to log off.
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JohnnyD does she read these poems you write for her? It is truly beautiful the way you speak of this lady with such devotion and respect... **sigh**
Mareta
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Breathtaking
Absolutely beautiful. Your words are so sincere and your flow comes across flawless. Pen on! This is a truly lovely poem.
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The dance is on huh.
You come up bashful
to she so beautiful
asking for a dance
she takes the chance.
The music is good
as country always should
and you say baby
you're always with me.
She looks for out
and the music shouts
but your gentle touch
holds her feelings much.
Then her eyes tear
as you wipe clear
for you have given
what she has forgiven.
Oh dance and swing
father, daughters and sing
with country crooners loud
as both dance proud.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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Something to live for
A promise made to live and hold true for the rest of ones life. It gives me reason to want a pure love. Something that can never be held and defiled by human hands. Wonderful.
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So Beautiful
This, Daddy, is just so so lovely!! I wish it were for me (How selfish) mind you, I know you care for me and this is reflected in your messages to me. This poem was excellently expressed and described throughout and the rhymes were consistently done and created an effortless rhythm throughout! You are so talented, this is perfect!
Blissful Princess -
i love you pa pa and I hope you get what you so ricly deserve
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lucky woman eh..
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crystaldust 18-11-06 22:28
Hi JD: this is a jewel of a love poem. Your September lady is a very lucky woman and so are we in that you share with us your celebration of loving. Thank you for that. Applause attached. Joy -
This is beautiful. Just your words are so full emotion.. it's amazing. It leaves me speechless really. Great write...
-Ambz
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Beautiful
I think you have a huge heart my friend. A discerning taste at this life stage means timing is extraorinarily important too....gotta be in the right place at the right time eh? Man.....so many elements in crafting our worlds!
xxoo
dk
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how sweet! I love your very heartfelt writes! mwahhhhhhhh I hope she appreciates it!
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amazing
johnnyD This is just so beautiful.. absolutely breath taking..
She is a lucky woman to have you.. Your words melt the heart.
much love
Dusty -
beautiful
Oh my god ... that is just so beautiful ...
You always have such an amazing way with words Daddy ...
When I get married will you write my wedding vows for me ?
I love this beyond words ...
Beauty and love at it's uptmost best !!!
Stay safe
Much Love
~Joala
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