On a bed of flowers, she'd take her seat
And swing her way to the blue sky,
Her rope of fancies would loosen neat
And hold the breeze to have their tie.
In deep, dark eyes would sweet stars shine
While she sings a song of joyous days,
Of fairies and elves and all thats fine
In her joyous swing, which sweetly sways.
To the farthest skies, she'd fly
Beyond the hills, beyond that realm,
She’d sway and swing, higher than high
To watch the glories gilde in gleam;
She'd smile and play with the rainbow's curve
And walk beside the colors bright,
Then she'd dance with grace and verve
And rest her head on the clouds in white.
Her toes would kiss the city's peak
While floating clouds caress her locks,
At her lovely form would Life go meek,
And arrest the hands of earthly clocks.
She is the queen of delicate dreams
Who eludes her way with utmost grace
And gently sway with the shining beams,
Until she collides with the new moon's face.
~~ raspberry (Archana Jay)
In a list
A contest entry
- Your on your own it's Rhyme Alone by Legend.
600 points, ended November 24, 2006, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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with your fancies i felt myself also on the swing...really beautiful...
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like dance of sugar plum fairies
whoa... i had to read that twice. it's so light and airy that i couldn't even figure out how you managed to do that with mere words. it seemed so ethereal in this lil'lady's tripsing along the top of the city skyscrapers and tickling the clouds. the title gives such a vivid idea of what is about to come making me want to find out who this queen of the dreams really is. the ending was kinda odd that she'd crash into the new moon's face, only that isn't the new moon black? meh. small detail, you weren't joking about your latest hit, this is gorgeous.
thanks... i hope my stuff can compare sometimes... good job sis
gooday
phil
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PRETTY
This is a very beautiful poem!!!! You did a great job on this one!!! I really enjoyed it!!! Keep up the great work!!!
Hugs,
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Luscious!
A lovely cascading filigreed vision floating on cotton candy clouds! Sweet! Good luck in the contest!
xxoo
dk
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A beautiful, dreamy write.
s and best wishes ~Genie~
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Wonderful poem. Full of fancy and dreams and imagination and life, Well written and completely captivating. Good luck in the contest. Always'trynfinity
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Beautifully expressed
I certainly could not resist writing to the wonderful picture either…the beauty I see in it……many thoughts rumble…..as did you mind and heart writing your piece of emotional rendering of heart…..as always a joy to read your rhyming poetry….you do so well……..fantasy’s of a child’s mind…..ohhhh such brings back to me…..those days……beauty-full write Razz….enjoyed this immensely
Malabu
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Wonderful
A pleasure to read, I love it
Take care, Nip
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Beautiful
A very beautiful and well concieved poem Archana. As always you provide us with a joyful read and excellent entry in this competition.
Jim
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this is a very lovely write with solid rhyme throughout and nice flow liked the imagery in this. Good luck in the contest
love and light
blaze
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I liked the poem. It was quit interesting. Your a great poem writer. So keep up the good work.
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Amazing!!
This is written in such an amazing and vivid way, almost as if it sings to me as I read. Fabulous rhythm, excellent rhyme, truly an expression of poetic charm. Brilliant!
~Lori
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i so wish i had the talent to write like this. absolutely superb. fantastic write. good luck and god blessx
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Magical
Remarkable, magical in every sense of the word. This reads like a classic lullabye, such a soft, tranquil, delicate undertone throughout - what a talent you are!
Bravo on this masterpiece,
galfalfa
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in awe
I am in awe of the structure and form of this poem
and much of its delightful language ~
'To watch the glories gilde in gleam'
and its beautiful story ~
'At her lovely form would Life go meek,
And arrest the hands of earthly clocks.' WoW!
you are a very talented poet!!
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raspberry you have once more produced a glorious poem that captures the reader and holds them A most enjoyable read All the best in the contest
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Deelighful
I sometimes wish my mind could write so delicately but mine become too dark I fear, yours is a breath of spring air. Thank you for sharing. -
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Thankyou for the very delightful comment
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Good!
Great piece indeed. The flow and the dreamlike images assail into your eyes is a moment worthwhile. The light feeling in reading this poem is good as if your in bliss.
The words used are well executed. The on and off rhyming is very well done that it makes the poem better and more of a good craft.
Absolutely a good piece to read. Thanks for sharing.
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masterfully delicious
dearest archana,
I am truly moved and deeply touched by your incredibly well crafted poem. not only is it perfect in its form, but its message reflects the same perfection. wonderful imagery serves to express your vivid fantasy and sense of beauty.
what a joy to read such a masterpiece.
marion
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WooHoo!
Archana, Dear, this is lovely. You put so much life into your work, and this piece is no different. Your lovely poetic words flow gently and remarkably through the intoxicated mind of the lucky reader. Hugs, Patricia
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Thankyou sweetest U r such a lovely deary, u keep me encouraging.
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Amazing
Amazing write raspberry.You have written it beautifully.How I wish I could write like you.But I know that I will be able to as I improve myself....beautifully written.
God Bless You
Josh
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