Bloody hues swirl in the mist,
provoked by the charred face of
white, reflecting through obscure lobes...
the blood of necromancers vitiate
mother natures womb of purity
and she beckons with open arms;
the silence of the graves,
calmness of the enigmatic seas
and stillness of icy fear,
chilling even the greens to
never...rest in peace.
Mottled disgrace reel on the
naked flames beneath the morass
and look through it's pores the
blurred letters bequeathed by...
none in this haunted realm, yet
it ignites a craving lust of
nostalgia and I glance upon the
crude carvings that drown me in insomnia
and lead me to the untrodden paths....
of desolation.
Author notes
Picture by Kevinl8888
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A contest entry
- The endless contest (or longest contest is more like it)! by Ted E Bare.
450 points, ended April 30, 102 entries
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Comments
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necromancers - i love that i will ahve to incoroporate it inito a poem i do again for i have used it before and it also makes em think of the band rush
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hoodwinked!
i love this, the imagery and metaphors are very strong. i also love the bit of alliteration peppered through out here!
great write!
LXF
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Hoodwinked!
Love the alliteration, not sure if it's intentional or not but it sure adds to the effectiveness of this piece. Good write!
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You've been Hoodwinked!
Wonderful piece hun, dark and captivating, I enjoyed the structure and line breaks and the imagery is vibrant. great work. Hugs, Bunny
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Hoodwinked
You have been hoodwinked by the poetic bandits as you may already know. This is a very interesting piece I enjoyed reading it very nicely done. I am a personal fan of freeverse so I really like this. Great job and keep it up.
Never give up
Always write from the heart
Kate
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I can see what you mean with the structure of freeverse, now. This poem is one of my favorites, ever. The detail shines through metaphors and imagery, grasping attention as though to never let go. The darkness drew me in and I've been trapped...lol...Keep up the great work!
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thx for the truly wonderful comment...dont hv words to express my feelings
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HOODWINKED BY THE POETIC BAndits! great dark write you have penned here. I too know of insomnia and what it can do. Nightmares also. The write really brings all that to light. good job
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Hoodwink!
You have drawn me into this write from the first line - what an opening sentence that is!
I definately like the imagery you have captured within these words, as well as the beautiful, yet dark metaphors you added with them.
I also like the fact that I had to look up two words lol 
English isn't my maternal language so yay for expanding my vocabulary
Anyway, great poem you have here - keep it up!
Leander
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HOODWINKED!
A very dark and descriptive piece you have penned here which showcases your talent brillantly.
You have just been ambushed by a member of the Poetic Bandits, why you ask? Simply because we think your writing is deserving of attention and we intend to make sure it recieves it, we hope you enjoy your day!
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Very Good...
I liked it. Full of imagery, which made the poem have its own voice.
All the best,
~T.S~
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this is how you write free verse, it is simply your getting your feelings out in a poetic manner. [check out my writings...the more recent ones for signs of free verse!♥] it was very dark and intriguing, something a dark lover finds appealing and irrestible! cheers!
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Wonderful writing here. Stunning, actually. Quite dark as well. Keep writing, you are very good.
All the best
Wayne
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You have done an amazing job with the imagery. It really gets your point across and allows the readers to see the emotions spill out onto the page. Excellent job!
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awesome...
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This certainly is not rhyming so fits into the free verse form just fine - if this is one of the first time you ahve ever written it, you have really done a good job. When you are used to rhyming it is hard to change over. Don't think you need an appostrophe in its in this case.
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Does every rhymer eventually abandon it?
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This is freaking awesome. Your work always astounds me! I love this. I love free verse and this perfectly portrays it! Just letting your heart sing free verses of what you are feeling inside, or just the random thoughts that come to mind. It's incredible. Great poem my friend!
HE WILL EAT YOUR FACE!
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Thanks for the wonderful comment and applauds
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this is pretty darn good. maybe you'll get to lovin' free verse so much, that your next contest won't allow rhyme.....lol
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Wonderful
This is very well done. I didn't see any problems with the punctuation. Free verse is after all free. You could put a space between the end of the first stanza at peace and the next one beginning with Mottled, but that just breaks it up a little no big deal.
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Thanks for the great comment I'm glad you liked it
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Another great free verse you have written.... this is thought provoking, you have painted some amazing visuals for the reader
mother natures womb of purity
and she beckons with open arms;
very well done
keep writing
Tracey -
SN = Screen Name
I don't know why you don't think your any good at freeverse, this isn't the best poem I ever read, but it is certainly marvelous and striking, (although it would look better left aligned).
Thank you for stepping out of your comfort zone and writing this for my contest. It means so much!
Shirley
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