I've got this feeling
My mind is reeling
Peeling
spinning
out of control.
I want to scream it
feel it
keep it
Wildly trying
to gain control
I feel like crying
slowly dying
Someone save me
I'm out of control
I'll just lie here
sleep here
die here
Leave me alone
I've got it under control
Author notes
I LOVE MYSELF NO MATTER WHAT
A contest entry
- let it all go by restless-romantic.
300 points, ended December 22, 2006, 65 entries
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love the rhythm!
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Thank you
Thanks. Glad you like it! =3
Krazy.K.
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Good job here. Best of luck to you and Happy holidays.
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Thanks Wolfbane! Merry Christmas!
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Wow
I really liked this piece, it was very descriptive, and worded quite well. Good Luck in this contest!!And Thanks for sharing!!!
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Thanks for the comment Emily!
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Well thanks for entering!!! I'm really looking for new poems but i can tell that you feel this way now too. I hope that it gets better for you in life. Don't shy away from being you lol. Good luck!
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Thanks!
Thanks Drewce. (cool name btw) Thanks for the comment and the support. It's always alright, except when it's not. lol. This is one of my more stressed pieces. =3. Anyway, thanks.
much love
Krazy.K.
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Like the way you build the momentum in this piece.
I could empathise with this piece a lot, keeping a lid on panic- it sent me instantly back to a cave dive I did and the sudden rush of fear when I was distracted from the wildlife and it dawned that it was a long way back and I couldn't just surface! I got it under control quickly thank goodness but it was totally unnearving! Well done.
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again Awesome!
after reading your other one, I just had to read this one! I liked this one even more!!!!!
I really liked the way you really hammered in the feeling when you kept repeating the same rhymes, sometimes with just one word! that was a totaly awesome and effective way to convey the emotion! another great write!
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Thanks
Thank you inspiration! Thanks for reading. And thank you for the applause. =D I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. I wrote it in a fit of frustration. lol. Thanks.
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Another Great Poem Of Yours
Well, I guess this would be the second poem of yours that I'm commenting on within 15 minutes :] I think I can relate to this alot. Never really being in control over myself, but always wanting to believe that I am. And replying to your comment below, being a control freak isn't bad :] I'm a bit of a control freak too. Anyway, like I said before, keep up the good work. There's nothing that I dislike about your poems so far. They're so realistic, it shocks me. Literally.
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Thank you.
Thank you for yet another kind comment Ghoul. And thank you for the applause. I really appreciate feed back from anyone who reads my stuff. I always Like to think I'm in control. lol. Thanks again.
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Spinning wildly out of the atmosphere, dizzy words that make me spin with ya! Good write and you can feel the panic of not being in control.
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Thank you cannon. Yeah, I'm just a liiiittle bit of a control freak. lol. =D
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