You are the vapor trails
Across the blue vastness of my
Vacant heart
From zero to heaven in Four ‘O Seven
Full moon over Sunset House
From Amsterdam to The Allegro
You are the scent of Michael
As it wafts through the midnight air
From an unlit candle
Brass gecko on the wall
Dispassionately guards the Navajo rug
10,000 waves… we never got there
Now I am another remnant in your drawer
With the matches from Casanova’s
The long ride at French Lick
These and others,
Silent history that says, “We were”
Traces of love
Copyright © Henri Ferguson 2003
Author notes
Personal anecdotes as I sift through the remains. The remains of two souls colliding, converging and diverging. In the final analysis as Jesse Winchester so aptly states,"that's what makes you strong".
Written May 16th, 2003
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imagine
that one of the aches
of the world
has secretly mended..
and music heralded
the news...
rising along allegro
with notes of
joy and laughter pealing
as we open the door
this is how i
come to see it..
The skies
We slept under
Were too uncertain
For forcasts
They came
They went
On moody gusts
Of the atlantic
Half~dozen weathers
In the afternoons
Playing four different movements
Of a wind symphony
Allegro
Andante
Scherzo
And Adagio
On the broken backs
Of white waves
Clouds thumping bass notes
Or
Brilliant wild apeggios
Were
Never long in comming
It seemed
It was about to rain
But
It never did -
beautiful personal poem. -Darmok
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I really enjoyed the smoke/vapour feeling of the whole poem,
because love that you think is so concrete and real turns out to
be so thin... like a strand of smoke on the wind, just blows
away... You captured this beautifully. This poem contains some
really beautiful phrases, you do have a way with words, almost
like a painter painting a picture, but with words... Truly
pretty poem.
Jen
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amen on the author's note...
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bittersweet loss...emptyness yet traces...sigh!
rhiannon ...lovely job... -
i am digging you poem a lot. also you r comment about growth. that's the only way to move on, look at what you've learned and realise all the positive that came from the situation/relationship (even if it wasn't so positive).
great write.
much respect friend.
laurie. -
So, what you are saying is...in the end it makes us a better person? LOL..I know. The words are so poignant. Something we all go through. Then, as you said, go through the stages, finally arriving at acceptance. Then being able to look back and see the blessing in disguise. Feel the relief that we are finally past it all, and then recognize the inner knowledge that we are better off in the long run. I spent years this way, all the while knowing I was miserable, but I accepted it for all the wrong reasons. Now I am out of that, and moving beyond. And saying much too much.
I enjoyed this, Henri. Have lived this stage. But you worded it so well. I loved the opening stanza. Vapor trails.......
Loved it all, actually.
Maddie
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Thank you all for your words, and I do concur with most of your comments but would add that every situation like this holds within its pain an opportunity for us to grow. Without a doubt there comes that predictable phase where hurt transmutes to anger and other negative feelings, but these are really a phase unless we "choose" to get stuck there. Sometimes the people who hurt us the deepest become our greatest teachers, and for me, if I can walk away from something like this with a healthy and compassionate closure, I will become receptive to the lesson/growth that lies dormant within. Ultimately this is what will allow me to evolve into that self actualizing being that I crave to be. There are no shortcuts and hanging on to pain, however benign, becomes an impediment to this.
I thank you for your insightful feedback.
Henri
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Fabulous Henri...and then some more...think Coyote summed up all I would have said...
A very unique write in its expression and description...beautiful words written conveying what seems to be a deep sadness....a forever heartache...
Ten out of ten...and them some more...
~ sonia ~ X -
As a good friend of mine once said...we can let go of what ails us until it becomes simply "managed pain." I don't think the feelings of the past ever disappear(as you aptly display in this post) but somehow they fade and blur so that the emotion becomes like a candle that barely flickers in the darkness.
I enjoyed this piece!
UB:) -
Painfully brilliant
With words like vapor, vacant, wafts, unlit and remnant, the traces of love are sorrowfully displayed, but even so, between the lines there is a detachment stirring - carefully taking apart that which fell apart.
Masterfully done, Poet.
You had my own heart in a painful state of recognition here ...
Kindest Regards,
Myra -
Loving is painful...we are born to feel pain...pain leads to despair...we jump into the well...the magic remains love...it becomes memory...inside our hearts...thank you, maria
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A great write that spoke volumes to me. A sad tale of lost love, told in such a way as to make the reader feel it. Great job. ~Angel
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This has some fantastic phrasing in it, and i love all the little details. Strong language and form, i really enjoyed this... a refreshing piece, that opening stanza is awesome.
Excellent write,
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we seem to be in a similar mood again lol...such poignancy captured so well...you write with style and I applaud you for it
thank you for this poem
Victoria xxXxx
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we tend to insulate ourself from the big stuff in order to move on, but we don't realize is that the traces are what often times causes us the deepest pain.
time doesn't heal all wounds, it simply makes them easier to bear.
wishing you peace of heart,
CM
xo
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Henri-
This is a very sad piece... I get the impression of finding bits of memorabilia that were collected during a relationship - only now the bits serve to remind us that the relationship is over... I like this reflective style of writing... well thought out and very well executed. I enjoyed the read... Take care – Helen
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great piece, i love ur word usage, very beautiful, thanks for sharin, keep up the good work!
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A beautiful piece, sad too. Interesting style of writing looking forwards to reading some of your other work. The last stanza finished the piece so effectively, really left me thinking about love. Thanks a lot for sharing this
~Emma~
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Excellent! Very nicely done!
Though this was sad, I enjoyed the read! Made me think of Elvis's song "Traces"...very pretty and very sad!
(((Hugs)))
< 3 Maureen
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reminds me of when i go through the old shoe box containing memories... well done
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