When the Yellow Lines Blend Together

I wanna plant my one foot over the other
I wanna move on
I wanna shake it off, not live through another
I wanna move on

I wanna keep on
I wanna speed up
I wanna get out of here
I wanna pack up and leave

I wanna feel it
I wanna feel satisfying loneliness
I wanna feel it
I wanna feel it without you

I wanna keep on
I wanna speed up
I wanna get out of here
I wanna just move along

I wanna

I gotta

I'm moving on

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Somtimes I just wanna, even though I just can't.

Just won't.

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To Heart
December 8, 2006
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!!!
I like all of the repeatative 'I Wanna's.' It shows how much you really want to do move on.
x Gemini x
December 8, 2006

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It's nice.

Be careful of tedious repetiviness with the "I wanna", but don't get me wrong, it's ok as is, just thought i'd warn you a bit. Check out my One Day poem, its the same way, you can look at the fb and the format, to see if it helps.

Also, puncuation will make it look more professional, though not exactly need.
JonKohan
December 7, 2006

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well i see this is your first poem on this site so i'll say welcome i guess. it's pretty good a little basic but it has meaning for you all that's all that really matters, i did enjoy reading it and that's why i left some kind of a comment cause if i didn't like it trust me i wouldn't be writing anything. anyways keep up the good work and have fun here.

Jonny