Tip! Tip! Tip!
The sound of tip toes I heard
Switched on the lights
Sat on my bed
Switched on the TV loud
Tip! Tip! Tip!
I can still hear, the sound
Suddenly the clock on the wall struck midnight
It’s a dark rainy night
Silken robe covering my bare skin
I shiver and my dog sits alert
Loud buzzing makes me jump
Damn! This alarm clock was not suppose to ring
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Damn it! What is it?
I slowly get off the bed
Vampire Slayer song comes on
I just stepped on the damn
Damn vampire slayer doll
Tip! Tip! Tip!
The sound is now deafening
I run to the darkened bathroom
I switch on the light
And shout
Damn it was my tooth brush crawling on my hand
Tip! Tip! Tip!
No water faucet leaking
Neither is toilet bowl trickling
But the sound is still lurking
I turn as if I saw a shadow
I quickly run back to my bed shouting
Who is there? Who is there?
But no one is answering
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Deep scared sighs I take
As down the stairs I walk
Tenderly on my tip toes
Thug! Now what was that?
Damn the lights had to go off
Tip! Tip! Tip!
The window latch breaks open the window
Inside the frozen winds blew
The sheer drapes went swoosh
Breaking my tiffany table lamp
Tip! Tip! Tip! I quickly reach for the light remote
I was suppose to put the damn batteries
And never got around to do it
I some how reach the switch and switch on the blinking fluorescent light
The room is chilled bear
Dripping with poured rain from the leaky roof
On to my china cabinet
Leaving trails of nails
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Breeeezzzzz, nightly breeze plays through my sound system
I pick up the remote and try to power off the system
Thinking it’s still on, but only I was fooled
Tip! Tip! Tip!
I ran to the window slowly
Pulled it towards me
But had to face a fight
Yet I didn’t give up and closed it tight
Momentarily silence creeps in
As winter perspiration under AC drips
My heart starts to weep
It’ll be okay, I’m not alone, God is with me
I try to tell myself
But I’m not very convincing
Bham! And it’s back
Tip! Tip! Tip!
The sound it driving me insane
No toilet leaking
No faucet dripping
Oh the kitchen faucet might be running
Negative!
Shaky hand now open the refrigerator
The lights start to flicker
On off, on off on off
I quickly shut the damn door
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
I’m getting closer to the tipsy sound
A warm cool breeze tickles my nightly messy hair
The robe goes swoosh and off here I go
Tip! Tip! Tip!
The sound is haunting me
I run back faster than a sound wave
Leaving everything untouched downstairs
In my bed room on to my lonely bed
I remember every prayer of every religion
Seek their forgiveness while thanking
Thank you O Lord for everything
Please show me some sign
You hear my prayer
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Not this sound
The real one that I don’t know what
The house is illuminated with lights
Night light, florescent, yellow, halogen
Even the emergency lights
You name it, I had it
Tip! Tip! Tip! Tip! Tip! Tip!
The sound bunny is still going stronger and stronger
Bang! On the door I hear
I think, it came from downstairs
Another bang and then another
I shout as I shiver
Who is there?
Come out
I’ve a gun, if come, I will shoot
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
The mind takes a plunge into the scary mud
While heart beats bounce around
The alarms wouldn’t stop buzzing
And the damn wall clock won’t stop ticking
Rrrrrrrrrrriiiiiingggggggg, the phone rang
Breaking the deafening silent tipping sound
Tip! Tip! Tip!
I pick up and some one hung up
The cell phone suddenly plays my love song
So not needed
It’s in the other room being charged
The ringers stopped
Keeping the sound
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Kicking alive
Bang on the door, once twice, thrice
Followed with land line ringing
Then my cell phone played my song
Again and again and again
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Tip! Tip! Tip!
Frozen tears float in the dreary eyes
A drop on the cheeks
And off I cry
Please God! Please Oh God!
This time the phone won’t stop ringing
My hands are glued
As my body frame sits still on the bed
Tip! Tip! Tip!
While merciless tipsy sound
Won’t stop hounding me.
My little pooch wags her tail
Sitting still on the bed
Lying beside
She looks left and right, and all four sides
Her eyes roll
But she dares not to utter barking sound
She’s panting as I glared at her
The cell phone ringer
Just played my song
Yet again
The land line burst ringing again
And this time I picked in time
Shouting on top my lungs
Who is it?
What do you want?
And voice on the other end
I hear it loud and clear
I was stunned
Nailed to the beige plush ground
Right beside night stand
When the voice
Just said….
Author notes
Here's another one for you my friend...from the alluring devil's hannd..handed to you on a gold platter...once you received it...and you will be pulled..into devil's world.
In a list
A contest entry
- Twist by Rootless.
375 points, ended December 21, 2006, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 31 to 35 ages enter your best prewrite Judged by RedwingSpirit.
475 points, ended January 18, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BEWARE ! YOU ARE IN FOR A SCARE ! ( EASIEST CONTEST EVER )(PREWRITES ALLOWED ) by Alex Hex.
300 points, ended May 8, 12 entries
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Comments
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Very greatest poem i ever did saw
No seriously this is great . just being silly. Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest. I wish you the best of luck
RedwingSpirit
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Yep!
..And this one too!
Everybodies either had a tip, tip or tap, tap bump in the night thing.
This one everybody will relate to. Even us guys. Except my bump, bump got a loaded 12 ga pointed at it. hahahaha... -
OWow!
This was a wild sounding night. I'd say a storm with a hidden tree branch upon your roof?
A neighbor calling and having trouble with his or her own phone line. Possibly using thier own cell phone?
Dogs are mighty protective no matter size if there had been an intruder your dog would have smelled them, Thus growl or bark.
I had that a similair experiance my first winter up here in the woods. Only thing was it was a real person banging on the side of camp trying to scare me out of here. I actually shot the 12 ga. after several warnings. A truck drove off very fast from just down my dirt road followed by more Buckshot to the tailgate. I haven't had any problems since and nobody has been robbed above me since I've been around.
Of course I'm lucky I didn't actually hit anybody. I'll have to buy rocksalt just in case there's a next time. Rocksalt leaves a good impression too.
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Good Guesses
hhmmm! you're actually thinking of what it is... I like that good guesses, are they right or wrong, what do you think? lol I'll get back to you... either way thanks for the reaction... wow so you are the town neighborhood hero - Jean Claud Van Dam good for you & please don't tell me you don't know him now that's really going to break my heart 
so could you come & kick some whatever in my neighborhood too??? thanks for your time I truly appreciate your supporting comment & love he yahooing applauds .... take care now... Minoo
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wow thats nasty... i was pulled in from the fery first line and still i dont know who is on the other end of the line.... this is and awesome write...
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Thanks Again Slipperssun
Thank you my friend for taking time from your precious life and reading my poems
I really apprecite your sweet encouraging comment. I know it's nasty & mean to leave the poem open at the end...hehehe what can I say, I'm twisted to the core Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it reading Take Care
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This poem was very long and very grabbing, however I feel as if I was cheated out of a twisting ending! I felt at more of a cliffhanger than anything, but either way, good job with the poem and good luck in the competition.
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Great Job!!
Ahhh. You had to end it right there didn't you? But I must admit that piece was very and truly impressive. Really great! I really like this.......Beautifully done. Lol, I can seriously go on and on!! Anyways, keep up the work! -
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Thanks hun for Stopping By
Yep, I had to what can I say! hehehehe she-devil is my middle name
Thanks hun for stopping by and taking time to read my poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it and cannot thank you enough for such an encouraging thoughtful comment. Thanks a lot
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what a swizz!!!!
and here was me, glued to the spot, reluctant to move in case I missed something? huh....
this is a very exciting write, keeps you on your toes until the end, or does it? who knows, only the devil while he holds your hand!!!!well done.
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Thanks Mike!
Thanks a lot for stopping by & I'm glad you enjoyed reading it too. I always love smileyes & yaoodling applauds. Thanks again for you rlovely comment.
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Loved it!
Hello hello to my favourite poem writer! I read your poem again lol, I want to finish reading all of them if I can but you wrote quiet alot of poems. I suggested on my profile that people read your poems seeing as there really really good! I loved this poem! It's really really great! Why'd it have to end? Well it's a great poem! Keep it up, wish I was as good of a poetic writer as you are! Take care hunni byebye
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My Perfect Angel!
Sweetie, you've left so many heartfelt messages that I'm running out of words to express my feeling. All I can say is thank you so very much & cherish you in my heart I will...until I die. You make my day brighter & night shinier. Silly Billy Take care.
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Wonderful
This is a great write!! I love it!!! I'm going to to recomend this to all of my friends. I also liked how you kept it so suspensful, how you left a bit of mystery (never really saying what the Tip,Tip,Tip was) and how you were so discriptive about everything.
Keep Writing
~~Meri~~
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Thanks Meri Soooo Veeeee Much!
Thanks Meri honey! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. I really appreciate you recommending this piece, that is just very sweet & kind of you. Thanks a lot hun. I love teh yoodling applauds you given to me, it's my treasure. Thanks sweeT
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tip, tip, tip
i tried to leave without a comment but something won't let me, maybe it is that is this an interesting and well written poem that i laughed at some points or it could be that this had a great flow and i could picture, it in my mind. oh wait, no my shirt just got caught be a nail, lol, keep it flowing
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You are sucked into devil's world!
Thanks Prodigy for stopping by at my mansion. I shall now let you in...come join hands with me & take a seat..in just a moment I shal return...hehehehehahahaha. Thanks a lot for your time and such a lovely comment. YOu know you're hynotised and I'm making you dance to my tunes??? hehehe I love your applauds that are mocking, laughin hahahaha.
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Nice and very suspencefull and it leaves you wondering... what did the voice say... who was it...and was it a man or a woman? well enyway nice work
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Hey Lil Monkey!
Thanks sweetheart for stopping by and you enjoyed reading it. Thanks again. well who was on the other side of the phone is....Welcome to my world!!! hahahahahaha thats all I can say ssshhhh!
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Amazing poem! I wanna know what it is now!!! I suck at guessing games lol
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Thanks for the SilverLining!
Thanks hun! I know I hate it when someone des that to me too.. damn it just tell me...hehehehe. but for now you just have to do the guessing...all i want to say is welcome to my world Thanks a ton for the applauds and your time.
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EXCELLENT
Is it the loud ticking of the clock in a scary moment or water from the leaking roof. Hell I dont know but you have done a fantastic job keeping me on the edge of my seat. Good job your talent "REMARKABLE"
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Thanks Ami
I got you sitting at the edge of your seat! I like that...my devile little mind has finally twisted enough to allour you into my world. hehehehahaha. Thanks so much for your time and got to love those friendly laughing applauds.
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WOW you kept us in suspense, why did you cut it off whats that tipping noise
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Thanks Wings of Angel
Thanks you Angel for stopping by again and reading my poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it & can't tell what the sound is...for I'm frozen..lips locked & time is dead...now welcome to my world!!! Thanks for your time
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Fabulous!
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Thank you DivaT
Thanks Diva for stopping by and your smiling applaud. I appreciate you enjoying to read & the comment. Thanks again!
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Brilliant
Well, what suspense this held. I was holding my breath like mad, reading this one. AND I STILL HAVE NOT GOT A CLUE AS TO WHAT IT COULD BE LOLOL Just when it waa getting was getting exciting as well. Lolol
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Thanks My Friend Wayne!
I love your comment and my friend I can't tell you what the sound is...hehehehehe. But thanks for the smiley & applauds, I love them to include in my sinister/funny world. Thanks for your time & comment.
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Eeeeek!!!
You are a very mean person, this is the part of the Alfred Hitchcock Suspense Movie where they stop for a commercial break. Except you're not coming back after the interval This grabbed me all right, in the middle of the night as she rules out all logical explanations. I especially like "merciless tipsy sound", it has a sinister/funny connotation. My opinion of this poem is MEANMEANMEAN Thanks for the ride...I mean read 
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Hey Nitchmitch
I like your name kinda cool & inspiring me to write, hhhmmmmm! Well thanks my friend for taking time to read mypoem and enjoying it too. What can I say welcome to my sinister/funny world where you'll be treated good...hehehehehe. Thanks for the applaud & all the smileys.
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that's what you get for leaving those dolls lying about on the floor lol the ending ellispes are three dots. is that the little pooch in your a page spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love... my dog, well if i had a dog, would eat that for breakfast lol
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Thanks Mr. Individuality
I always appreciate you stoping by and cruise through my lines. Yes picture under my name is my pooch, princess who rules my world. Thanks for the comment and your time.
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*shock* more suspensful than a King novel.
Please continue,little daemon.
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And You're Hypnotised
Sure deamon I am, I agree..first I allure you...let you enter into my beastly world...and suddenly grab you rmind..and chain you..to your poems...Thanks for being shocked my friend...the saga continues...never ending hehehehehe! I really appreciate you stopping by to read and get shock. I love the smiling applauds you gave me. Thanks my friend.
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Well, I have to say that I was pulled in and read until the end, but I certainly hope you will end it with something. I suppose leaving it to the reader's imagination is good in some pieces. If it were a novel, I'd probably be pretty upset, but it works here. Great job of keeping your reader's attention. Patricia
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Thanks Patricia
I know, I'm so mean...minoo the meanie hehehehe. My lips are sealed and mind bolted...hands glued...legs stonedand i stood as if dead...this is why couldn't complete, not my fault, I wasn't allowed for I was caged... Anyways, thanks a lot for stopping by and at the end....incomplete....Thanks for the smiley and yoodling applauds
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beautiful job
beautiful job of keeping the reader anticipated, as was your soul purpose. please keep me informed if you decide to add a sequal to this.
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Thanks For Whisper I heard it!
Thanks gentle breeze of wind...i heard what you whispered...your smiling applauds gave you away...Thanks a bunch for your time and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. I sure will let you know if there will be any sequel
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Oh my stars!!!! What'd the voice say?!? I must know, I MUST! You've definitely pulled me in =]ugh. i'm on the edge of my seat. you cheater, lol. awesome work as usual!
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Hi Hun!
Thanks for stopping by and reading my poem, even though not your style. Yep sweetheart it really sucks, I was frozen so I couldn't finish my senses were jammed and my mind my locked...when I heard the voice say...Let the suspense build up. hehehehe! just toying with your mind hun! Relax & have fun! Thanks for stopping by & yoodling applauds.
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this is good but whyd u end it!!! i read it all the way through just to fin out what the tipping sound was and then you cut it off........ that sux! lol. r u ever gonna finish it? this was an AWESOME poem.
loves...
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Thanks Krystal - BStained-love
Thanks babe, for stopping by even though it's not your cup of tea and you still decide to read. I sincerely thank you for reading and enjoying it too. Stop by anytime, I know it sucks...but frozen were my lips, drained were all senses, the tip tip sound had deafened me while the voice on the phone shocked me..hehehehe that's all I can say. Thanks again for your wonderful comment. I love the smiling applauds, always
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WOW!
this grabs and hangs on tight! so spill the beans....
whats the tipping sound?
and who is on the phone???
you are a good mystery/suspense writer
keep on writing. what a talent you have!
God bless you
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Thanks Deb
Thanks so much, it means a lot to get such an encouraging comment from highly respected poet like you. Thanks again..but let the suspense lurk some more...hehehehe Thanks for the applaud and time.
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AGGGHHHHH! The voice said WHAT? How coukld you cut it off like that. This grabbed me in and I kept reading. I am not sure what the tipping is. I thought maybe the window was left open.
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Thanks My Lady!
Thanks for being grabbed by my poem. I;m sorry but that me..meanie me hehehehe! Just have fun. Thanks again for being the very first one to read. All I know I shouldn't be writing this at midnight! I got to sleep too. Damn it! But thank you for your time
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