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Rambling! Part 1... (Longish) (So Not a Poetry)

You know how one rambles and rambles and never stops, this is exactly what I’m saying, would you just stop? Stop it please. I stormed out of the room & slammed the door on his face for I couldn’t take his rambling any more. This made me think while I walked down the stairs, damn it I left my car keys back on the Chester drawer right next to the bed in his bedroom, oh wait! My hands are empty because my new expensive coach handbag is still lying naked on his floor. Yukh! Okie, dokie, smokie!

Back up on the stairs, all the way to the 7th floor, panting, make up drizzling down my naked face as I look at the couple I saw like 10 minutes ago in basement lobby laughing at me as they walk out of the elevator. Looked at me like I was lunatic & then turned back to see the empty elevator that seems stuck to me just to mock me. What? What are you starring at? They shrugged & went their way. They quickly by passed me in the same direction as I was going. OH well who cares! I said to myself & kept striding.

I did notice though, it was right before my tired eyes, they were knocking at the door down the hall, kind of weird, I don’t know why. The door slammed & I’m thinking, God their laugh was very short lived. HHHMMMM, I wonder why. I finally dragged my shaking feet at his doorstep one more time, Knock! Knock! Knock! No answer! It’s ok he’s just mad & sort of have the right to since I did slam his door before.

I go on a door knocking spree once again. Knock! Knock! Knock! Still no answer. Ooooooooooohhhhhhhhhh! I yell, the door finally opened, but not the right one though from left & right, but definitely not the one I wanted to be opened. Now I bang, no more knocking, no more being ms. Nice. I banged & banged until my hands were red but still no answer. It’s weird. Oh well! I gave up & turned back & started to walk down the florescent alley surrounded with expensive paintings, well what do you expect from a building on Park Avenue?

I had walked 2 steps & heard the door open, quickly turned & I ran slowly, what do you expect even 2 steps after going down 7 flights & then climbing back to the place where you started, is not a joke my friend. I know it’s the right door this time because of that stupid cuckoo that sings welcome song ever time you open the darn door. I’ve heard this before, just a few seconds ago! Oh well I’m just tired and now hallucinating too, bravo, now I’m certified insane living her insanity insanely.

Damn you, I shout! I could just wring your neck! What took you so long to open this door? I said & I stood frozen the door did open as I wanted, but not the one whom I wanted to open. Shocked, terrified, puzzled, totally confused, my lips are sealed, my heart stopped, brain freeze I had. I was nailed to the ground…it can’t be..God tell me I’m dreaming or I’m dead.

Lips locked, brain dead, heart dropped hand glued to my sides as feet stuck to the land on the seventh floor of park avenue building in an expensive neighborhood. Only if I could...

Thank you very much for listening to my rambling, until next time I start telling hehehehe! Have fun...

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  • Gumz
    January 2, 2007

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    I liked it

    It was very good yes Aurielle is right it does need more detail but then i read your reply on it and now i am kinda excited I want to know why she was frozen. Omg this is a new way of writing like a story or something its hard to think of ideas I know exactly how it feels i need fresh ideas on mine but it doesn't always work that way some ideas i listen to and some i am like NO that as nothign to do with it and all that but keep up the work I can't wait to read this sequel!! ~kal

  • Disturbed Prodigy gold member
    December 9, 2006

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    this is good, i have to say, it made my jaw drop and my eyes pop out, well i found one, but i will get the other after this comment, lol keep it flowing

    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 9, 2006
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      Thanks my friend Prodigy!

      I love to hear from you. Thanks again for stoppin gby & hope you found the second jaw soon. hehehehe. YOu are a darling. I really appreciate your uplifting & encouraging comment. Thanks hun!

  • agalford7053
    December 9, 2006
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    ooh weirdness

    ooh i likey the weirdness... sweet!! you did a great job!! i Love da randomness.
    lol


    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 9, 2006
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      Thanks Agal

      Thanks hun for stoppping by and enjoying reading my poem. I love your smiling yahooing applauds. Thanks for the upliftment & encouragement in your comment. Thanks again.

  • VampMonkey199
    December 8, 2006
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    suspensefull

    Very nice work you always leave the reader wondering at the end.One more time good work !!!

    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 8, 2006
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      Hey My Lil Monkey!

      Thank sweetheart! for your lovely comment. & grinning smiley, I simply love it. That is the whole idea keep you coming back & this one will have the sequel...when I don't know. Thanks again for stopping by!

  • jess09stevenson
    December 8, 2006
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    kool

    kool

    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 8, 2006
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      Thanks Jess

      But not as Kool as you Thanks again for stopping by to read my rambling...blah...blah...blah. Thanks for the patience and your comment. I love it coz its Kool!

  • wings of an angel
    December 8, 2006
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    This is a very good write that you have penned here

    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 8, 2006
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      Thanks Again Wings-of-Angel

      Thanks my friend for your frequent visits. I love you dropping by to say hi. Thanks for your time adn ai appreciate you reading my rambling!

  • xox-lankan-xox
    December 8, 2006
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    I read your story and it's great, but the ending Wahhhhhhhhhhh *cry's in the little corner* But all the same one of your best works yet. Well I'm off to read your other poems and sotries. Take care and keep it up hunni! Byebye


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    December 8, 2006

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    I liked much of the flow, but couldn't figure the motive for being where you said you were. Why are you there? What's the grand scheme? If it's a mystery, why is it a mystery (where is the sense of the ellusive, versus just no rhyme/reason? The language is interesting and the continuity is effective. Some of the ideas are way cool (leaving insanity insanely, for onw).
    U found a typo...you probable mean, "every time", not ever time.
    The okie-dokie smokey...is that a regional thing? If so, the broader/average reader may miss what it means.

    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 8, 2006
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      Thanks My Friend!

      I love your comment its thoughful, perfect balance of encouragement & critiqui, I need to take lessons from you how to critique my own poems to begin with. I love it. Thanks so very much for helping me become a better writer. No actually I can't remember when did I start using this slang! it just means okay then!! Darn typo. I'll fix it right now. Thanks for taking time to read my rambling. There is a sequel that will reveal everything that's missing....

  • my savior-pedro
    December 8, 2006

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    no!!!!

    u did it again. you didnt finish the story!! your gonna get me wondering again..... o well. good write tho. i like how you have as lil suspense too. loves...


    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 8, 2006
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      What can I say honey!

      Thanks for coming back for more...hehehehe I know aren't I mean! But promise this time the sequel will be coming, may be later or may be soon. Oh yes! I have a group, yeah! my first group! do you wanna check it out? No rush no pressure. Thanks sweetie for your apllauding comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

  • Aurielle
    December 8, 2006

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    wow but more detailed

    Its good maybe you should describe what you see so the reader could know and describe the people. Yet i love the voice of a teen. Its vrey clear

    • Live4FandFs silver member
      December 8, 2006
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      Hello Again My Dear!

      Thanks Aurielle for being the first one to read my rambling.. The whole idea is I will have the sequel where all the secret of why was she cfrozen will be revealed until then what do you think she saw behind the open doors??? Ideas Please???
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