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Fading Subconscious

~Fading Subconscious~

I知 waiting for you but you池e fading away
Maybe we値l meet again someday.
Torn out of reality, I知 at the edge of self-destruction.
It痴 just me, I'll hide away, you'll know where to find me

So I sit here patiently on the hard concrete
And scream in bitter silence.

I asked about you but no reply
Was it just a dream that happened long ago?
Maybe it was just another lie
And all your time gets wasted in my cold daze.


I found my place in nowhere
So nowhere is my home.
I知 pathetically left here all alone
When I can be with you.
Is this what you really want?

I want you to know
This conflict is mine alone.
Yet, I agree with every word that you say.
~Rhiannon

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  • Susan John Francis
    August 25

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    This sicknen heart and mind always puts us i a difficulty. Its a well described thought.
    found my place in nowhere
    "So nowhere is my home.
    I知 pathetically left here all alone
    When I can be with you.
    Is this what you really want?

    I want you to know
    This conflict is mine alone.
    Yet, I agree with every word that you say"

    These line ae the one which i can relate to most .


    • UnderTheWeepingMoon silver member
      August 25
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      Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it. I'm glad to write something that others can relate to, though knowing they relate to it is sad to me. We should not have to feel this way. Hope your day is beautiful.

      • Susan John Francis
        August 26
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        Well Thanks for the greetings, God bless you too and get us all in a greener pasture.
        Love Susan
  • Arzab
    June 7, 2007

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    Powerful write. I liked the second last stanza the best. It made me think of a person who even if they aren't all alone may emotionally feel all alone in life if a connection isn't there. Great write.


  • gene88
    February 14, 2007

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    ooh, i like this too. most poems don't have feeling but this one does. it has emotion. the backround fits in brillianty.


    • UnderTheWeepingMoon silver member
      February 14, 2007
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      Thanks again, so much.

      I'm not very fond of my writings...I mean I write them, I post them, but I'm not really satisfied with them. Maybe everyone feels that way about their own stuff? When I read things like you write, I feel very elementary in what I write.
  • shadow12
    December 24, 2006
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    nice i luv it
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