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Innocence Lost

 

Bare innocence lay on broken remains of an altar.
Fading, the Ayoo yi of celebrating women,
the rythmic pounding of pestle against mortar.
Old world sounds usurped by the cacophony of modern noise.
Pale soles & palms stained bridal henna's redish brown.
Trusting eyes, wide shut, soft moonlight caressing ample curves.
Damp green vines inch over dark nubian skin,
so binding willing ankles & aching wrists, for when
death calls, the souls stirs in answer.
As cocks crow, a black hole, a cancer.

Eerie silence falls, streaking on a twin tailed comet boding ill.

Gossipy trees crowd in above the virgin beauty.
Pockmarked sister moon's lamp a sickened ashen gray.
Scything winds revive forgotten harmattan's dusty chill.
Astride it rode a hint of decadence, the breathe of decay.
Great revelry began, discord stole through rustling ranks
with the laughing candace of the talking drum,
and sweeping pestilence blotted out leering stars, as
death calls, the soul stirs in answer.
Creeping forth with the stealth of a shadowmancer.

Churning fills the featureless sky, fury stayed by a hand unseen.

Looming, a shadow of oily blacknesss.
Within the prison of its eyes lurked a 101 damninations.
Fire leapt up, the choking fumes of a funeral prye.
leaving the surrounding forest ridden, desolate.
Wrapped around the sacrifice in a smothering blanket,
took the distinct shape of a feathered serpent, coiled
the lined spikes of its underbelly puncturing the voluptous body.

Rivulets of blood flowed down hands fallen limply for when
death calls, the souls flocks to answer
with intricate steps much like Ndako kansa.

Author notes

Women in my tribe shout Ayoo yi to express joy especially during weddings or naming ceremonies & i mean shouting at the top of their voices, i cant even mimic them. And ndako kansa means our great father or protector,the crocodile. My people, the nupe people revere crocodiles. i'd love to discuss all the myths they appear in but it'd take a long time so...

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  • ms-cuddles
    October 1, 2007

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    Beauty Abounds

    i just loved the story. I'm so looking forward to reading so much more. So dark and beautiful at the same time. Hugs~ Cuddles


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    May 2, 2007

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    This has to be one of the most excellent pieces I have ever had the pleasure to read..
    You have created such an amazing portrait of things I know little of..
    thank you so much for sharing
    Peace
    ~M~


    • vanteya37
      May 2, 2007
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      I tried to do my best,not so sure i did well enough to justify the real thing but thank you,i really appreciate the kind comment.Excellent my poem? seems like im dreaming
  • mrajarams
    April 30, 2007

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    This is just but a beautiful poem. I love the way you have made the movement in this poem. It is incredible that you have presented a incredible write. Keep writing such wonderful poems. I would be happy, if you could stamp your views on my poems.

    • vanteya37
      April 30, 2007
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      i know how hard it is to read a poem of over twenty lines. Im very grateful.

  • ehhwhat
    March 1, 2007
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    very nice poem, i like it a lot. Thanks for entering my contest

  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 20, 2007

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    A wonderful taste of your world and culture. A wonder and pleasure to read and share with you. Thank you so much for writing of it and giving us a glimpse into a world we would never know.
    you write it so well. i so encourage you to continue to do so, for it is in writing that the stories stay alive.
    Thank you again for sharing it with us. i look forward to reading more of your life and culture.
    Best to you!
    mystic


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    January 4, 2007
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    you have spent a big hard work on it
    its a true voice
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words

  • The.poet.of.hearts
    January 4, 2007
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    you have spent a big hard work on it
    its a true voice
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words

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