Did I tell I’m a darn good cook?
You may ask my family and friends
The best one to seek opinion from is Matt
Love of my life who dares not
To tell me otherwise
This is how I knew from the beginning
He really loved my cooking
I made him a first dish with love of lentil soup
I added all the right ingredients
Tender love and tons of passion
Of course apart from all the basic spices
Lots of red pepper with turmeric powder
Sure salt had to be there in the mixture
With other hot Indian ingredients
With finely chopped onions, hot peppers
In the boiled to perfection lentils
Served it hot as my elders had taught
In a beautiful bowl with carved spoon
One sip and he looked at me
Stared directly into my eyes and said
What would I do without you!
Confused with a smile on my face
I turned around to say
Thank you with a question mark
He laughed, took another sip
And off he went to the computer room
Of course with the soup bowl filled
Came down in an hour
Bowl was empty
Hugged me tight, I was wet with his sweat
It was cold winter night
He then gave me wet kiss on my lips
And said out loud
What would I do without you!
I immediately asked him, what does he mean?
All he could say was “I need to go to the bathroom”
I will be right back with an explanation
To your humble question
After a long time, I guess well spent thinking
Locked in the room we call bathroom
Out he came smiling
Kissed me again and said
I love you way too much and will always love you
But please don't ever make me lentil soup of any kind!
Author notes
Want to Taste Hot Indian Spicy Lentil Soup???
In a list
A contest entry
- Soup by ian sawicki.
500 points, ended December 30, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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awesome
that soup sure packed some punch...smiling...they say a way to a mans heart is through his stomach...in this case the stomach thought otherwise...awesome write...smile and thank you for responding to my poetry...smile..David
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This is a wonderfully humorous poem, I quite did not expect the ending. It made me giggle a bit.
NIce poem. I enjoyed it well, as it goes with the John Lennon tunes I am listening to at the moment,
"watching the wheels"
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Minoo, another great poem from you. good luck in the contest
red roses
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Amazing!! 
Great and unique idea for a poem.
Thanks for sharing this enjoyable poem! 
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a good poem, it made me smile but the flow seemed a little awkward in places, for example, the ending here.
I love you way too much and will always love you
But dare not ever make me lentil soup of any kind!
but dare not etc - personally i think it would flow better if you said - but please don't ever make me...
i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Thank You Sir!
Thank you for your help and it does sound better, so I changed it Thanks for giving me a chance to enter your contest, it's an honor to be viewed by a very well thought poet like you and being critiqued is genuinely appreciated. Thanks again.
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I love Lentil soup, but I don't like spicy! Poor husband. This is really cute! Hugs, Patricia
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Fun Poem
This is very good and funn, and truly uplifting read. I never had lintil soup, I will have to give it try one of these days.
P.S.
I am new to AP, and would love if you could check out some of my work. Any comments or suggestions would be very much appriciated.
Much love 2ya and HAPPY NEW YEAR! -
haha.
This is funny. A very enlightening read. I happen to have a bad experience with "Carrot Lentils" myself....*shudder*
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Sounds like you could peel paint with that soup, hey maybe you could patent it as that Minoos lentil soup and paint remover/drain cleaner, Ha ha FUNNY write
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i have never really liked spicy food, but this is good you did a great job on this so to you my friend keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Thanks DP
Thanks my friend, you are a truly sweetheart and very loyal to your fellow-poets, I admire you and have great respect for you...Thanks hun for stopping by and reading this silly poem...I love spices & cannot do without them Thanks gain for the encouragement. Take Care & God Bless
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heheyhe sounds like his system and plumbimng couldn't handle the lentil soup. Soup is good for your soul and cures anything that ails you.
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Thanks My Lady
Thanks hun for stopping by to read this weird silly poem...but at least it made you laugh! soup is good for our soul and cures ails, so I can whip you my famous lentil soup, are you ready to be cured
? Thanks & Take Care
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LOL Omg Sis, this is sooo funny! I love indian foods but I have to admit they have to be on the mild side, my Rogan Josh wouldn't even cause a blush LOL. Hilarious and I bet the bathroom is glad it doesn't happen every night LOL
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Thanks Sis!
I'm glad it made lol yep the bathroom was sure happy to know, it didn't happen every night Well if you love INdian food, let me whip you my famous lentil soup Thanks for reading my silly poem & love the yahooing applaud Thanks
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Love lentil soup - although maybe the one you made had a bit extra in it - seems those hot spices made it a abit too hot for this guy. Easy to read and understand, funny to read as well. Light hearted and soup for thought - LOL
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Thank You Grannyeri!
Thank so much for visiting this silly poem I just wrote for the contest I'm glad it made lol...that was the purpose hehehe. I appreciate your time and encouraging sweet comment. Neah, in reality he can handle my spices and loves my cooking so he says...hhhmmmm Thanks again & Take Care
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this is a contest for prewritten poems only!
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LOL!
I absolutly fell off my chair with that first stanza... and you carried it through all the way! Well done, and you have certainly caught a catch there...true love without a doubt.
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Thanks Michael!
As long as you are lol with me & not at me I guess it's alright for you to well he could at least drink th soup I'd made for him no matter how spicy it is well sometimes words are not enough, the actions speak louder than words Thanks for reading my silly weird poem. I've no clue where it came from in my twisted mind...
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Soupurb!
Ha hahahahaha....hum hum um um...still
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Fun
This is a good one my friend.It was lighthearted and fun to read. Good Luck in the contest, and I hope you win.
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Thanks Mark
Thank my True Friend you find it funny...but your real friendship will shine if you will taste my lentil soup you will right??? Thanks for stopping by and reading this silly poem I just wrote, but in reality Matt really loves my cooking & can deal with my spices . Thanks again for the happy applaud.
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Minoo, you silly one. Hehehehehehe, remind me to never eat your hot and spicy lintil soup. I like spicey sometimes, but not to extreams. You are so cute. Good luck in the contest!
~ Mia
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Thanks babe!
My work is done, you at least laughed a bit...I know I've a tendency to put a little more spices than anyone can handle & sometimes even I can't handle but won't utter a word hehehehe because I've made it myself...I'm bad girl...
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