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Lightning Strikes

Flash fire in the heavens,
Fight or flight an instinct held at bay,
While staring into the virulent eye of the beast
Overhead churning the clouds into ribbons.
Youth's wonder carries us, chasing
Nature to nature's shore,
Beholding her power and grace above
The mercurial stillness of water.

- © Foxlette 2006

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Storm chasing with friends. Childlike wonder adding wind to our wings.

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  • Frodofan silver member
    January 31, 2007

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    I was sort of hoping for a rhyme at the end to give it a sort of "lightning bolt" finish. Still, interesting. I like the imagery and use of words.

  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    December 31, 2006
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    POWERFUL

    I LOVE THIS. THE POWER AND THE PURE BRILLIANCE OF THIS PIECE IS BREATHTAKING. KEEP WRITNG. LOVE THE IMAGERY THAT THIS PORTRAYS. SUCH DARK, BEAUTIFUL NATURAL POWER.


  • SorrowWithoutWords
    December 31, 2006

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    yummy! i love it! you have great imagery in this write! my favorite line was:

    Overhead churning the clouds into ribbons.

    that...was....unspeakably awesome! i can't even find the words! clouds into ribbons!! wow...thats the mark of a great poet right there. those words simply send me into an oblivion of thought! great piece keep penning!
    ~Sorrow~
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