The seeds of time, of fate, of circumstance
have given us the means to realize
the slimmest opportunity of chance
to see the things that lay beyond the eyes.
The abstract calls with promises of power
and flesh recoils at leaving comfort's womb,
our chances wane and lessen with each hour,
but, fog recedes and we are not alone.
So, when death's moment finally arrives
when torments must be faced and demons freed,
the light upon dark washes our lives,
what then will power’s final edict be?
Each darkened, battered, jaded, lonely soul
empowered by love make one another whole!
Author notes
Myra likes it when I rhyme, so I wrote another
In a list
A contest entry
- The Sonnet Experiment by ArchOblivion.
1100 points, ended October 2, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh may i have a typo.. *To me it has BOTH a fluid beat and a harsh beat and I like that* haha ok all fixed.
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Brilliant, the title threw me off guard when I began to read it but then it all made sense in the end. This has a really good rhythm and a really strong structure and form. To me it has not a fluid beat and in some lines a harsh beat and i like that. Great language and imagery. Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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This is just beautiful!! Nothing more need be said!!
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bravo
A really excellent sonnet packed full of fine philosophy as well, no mean trick, indeed! superb! bravo... bravo... bravo..
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I'm glad I clicked on this particular sonnet, I really loved it and can relate to it so well. It really reminds me of my life's jounery till now and I really related to the metphors that you used and the overall diction and flow was just simply intoxicating. With your permission I would love to use this for a school paper for British Lit with full credit to you of course and I would never take the credit for your work as well as anyone else's. Please get back to me of that question. Great Write my friend and Thank you for always being there for me.
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Indescribably Good
One could get hooked, you know...amile
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Lovely; wonderful simple structure, very palatable verbiage producing a flow that simply falls off the lips and your imagery is vivid. No brain teaser here, you created a vacation for the brain. Your ability to force a rhyme is an artistic talent. I take back all the bad things I said about you; for today. Love The Bitch
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Complete
Yes, yes, yes, indeed!
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Oh, oh, oh! A triple affirmative! How nice!
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Hmmmmmm...my heaven Even I am not Myra but I like this
The flow of the poem is smooth from start to finish.keep on writing!
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Myra does not have a monopoly on good taste! Thanks for your kind words.
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You have such a powerful way ...
of being vulnerably romantic! And I simply loved this. Thank you for writing the rhymes you feel. Thank you for walking a few steps with me, the world forgotten. Thank you, Allan, for giving gifts of you. I cherish this perfect poem with its profound message, for it is mine.
Love
Always Myra
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You ask and you shall receive.
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good work
an iterestingly lovely write
ah so your poetry is for yet another woman you are such a flirt ha ha ha..i wonder does myra know about the other 32 of us?
this is very good keep up the good work
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Is it 32 now? I was pretty sure it was 45, but I will take your word for it. You are funny!!!
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EXTREMELY BEAUTIFUL
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Thanks.
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nice
i enjoy the off rhyming taking two words that dont nescessarily rhyme but forcing them to in the context of rythm a lovely description of the moment of enlightenment keep it up. -
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I cannot take credit for starting that. Shakespeare did it many, many years ago... I just figured if it was good enough for him it was good enough for me. Thanks for the kind words.
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