I derive from essence
and born into darkness.
I didn't ask to live.
I was created for vengence.
Oh the irony,
for the Fates
to chose this form.
I'm but a puppet.
Floating through the planes
of consciousness and insanity.
They made me to kill
then left me with a soul.
A soul to scream
as I feel the cries
of my suffering victims.
The scars embedded in my mind.
I didn't not ask for this.
Forced to wear devil's chains
for the rest of my existance.
Unforgiven sins turned my wings gray.
Author notes
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These are my favorite lines"A soul to scream
as I feel the cries
of my suffering victims.
The scars embedded in my mind." Such a deep and dark write so full of wonderful imagery and emotions. Good luck and thanks for entering
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Oh. I loved the lines "scars embedded in my mind" and "unforgiven sins turned my wings gray." Such imagery in this piece. Dark, yet sad a the same time. Really cool. Nicely written piece. Keep up the good work.
Love always,
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a very well wriiten poem, full of darkness. thank you for your entry, and good luck
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Thank you for entering my contest. This is a very well written poem that does an excellent job of interpreting the image you were given. I do have a question concerning the first stanza:
I derive from essence
and born into darkness.
It looks like you might have changes tense between these two line. Line one looks like it is written in present text and line two looks like it was written in past tense. If I am intrepreting this wrong please let me know.
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Wow. Very dark and full of pain. I loved it. Thanks for entering, and good luck.
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