Promises made and promises broken
Make what you can of those words unspoken
“Through hardship and trouble, til death do us part,
I’ll love you forever and with all my heart.”
The vows that didn’t make the fears drift away
“I’m here for you baby, for just one more day,”
The next day you’re gone with my words left unsaid
“I don’t want you here, I just want you dead.”
I kept them inside but you came home again
With your suit and your tie and your cheap parker pen
Briefcase on the table and shoes by the door
Dirty underwear and clothes littered on the bedroom floor
You smiled your dumb smile and you asked for your tea
Standing there with all your expectations of me
Complained when I told you to cook your own meals
Told me I’m pathetic, like you’d know how that feels
Said that I’m not good enough and that I’m a bad wife
Told me how I’d held you back your whole life
Well guess what honey, you held me back too
Told me to stay in the kitchen, and to worship you
Warm up your sheets and lay there legs spread
Hoping you’d come soon, wishing I was dead
Then you brought your fist back and then you struck
And it was with that first punch that you ran out of luck
That’s the final moment that broke my resolve
You were suddenly the problem I needed to solve
And so I did with a knife from the drawer
It was as if I’d found what it was for
Its only purpose in life was to go through your chest
It was lovely and sharp so I think you were blessed
See baby, you weren’t, you left all the same
You’re just not as lively now as the way you came
Author notes
KK, a little bit angry, not even from my perspective but there you go... Some bits need work.
A contest entry
- Tissues and Issues by Lady-Pegasus.
750 points, ended January 18, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i thought thiswas good and has real good imargery it reminds me of a night when my mum kicked my dad out for beatings us kids up as my mum was disabled he hit her and she told him you either walk out as you are or you get carried out in the morning quite funny really he left in just his boxers but i thought your poem was really good
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I think you are on to something here with your submission in this contest. I think a little tweaking here and there could really spruce this up some and make it more powerful. And while I am here, let me say, welcome to Allpoetry! I hope you find us to be a helpful and friendly place for posting your future works. I encourage you to take some time to wander the site and check out all that we have to offer here. If you have any questions, please feel free to contact any greeter here. Good luck!
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Powerful Imagery
Thank you for your contest submission. Yes, the flow is ALMOST there just a very little bumpy. I would love to see this one refined! Sad truth in this commentary on a social aspect that is still not under control! Great Story, well told. Good Luck
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