I sometimes confuse
stars for airplanes
because there has to be
a reason...
My wishes aren't
coming true.
11:11
isn't magical
Ive made too many wishes
too many times
This false illusion
of a lie so large
is a slap in the face
that I've fallen again
So take this starving heart
I don't want it anymore
Because it only
bleeds for you
One more string
around my finger
To remember
I'm dying for you
This pain, this loss
This empty void
is consuming me
from that beating
puppeteer
So I've cut it out
with the sharpest
knife
of this pathetic life
and I lodged a stake in
Becasue I don't want
to feel anymore
The happiness of us
was to good to be
true
or to last
and now you
have to leave
You're being plucked
from my life
with a swift pull
to never return again
I've wished for a change
Hoped it wouldn't happen
Loved you,
becaues there was
nothing else
I could do
But there is no magic
There is no hope
And there is no love
So I turn the page
try to start a new chapter
but the dying,
the wishing, the hope
The false lie of love,
has made this chapter
my last
I hope that one more airplane
flies through the sky
to cover up those lying stars
So you think that's why
your wishes don't come true
Author notes
Yeha I was/am uber depressed.. and heres a little soemthing I had to spit out
came up with that line all on my own!
option 2
A contest entry
- I shread your book of poetry by Forgot2Breathe.
300 points, ended January 10, 2007, 15 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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i know i've commented this before but right now i feel and know so much of what you're saying damn you stars and airplanes and damn you emotions for lying
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awesome
hey. this has so much pain and hurt behind it. i know how you feel/felt about love because i went through the same thing. i can relate really well to this piece. i love it. i can find comfort in my world of self pity. you will find love again. you just have to stop looking and wanting it. don't give up. keep strong. i think your piece is exactly the true definition of what the split up is. you have described it so realistically and metaphorically. i love it. keep up the good work. keep it real and take care of yourself.
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The title first grabbed me, but
Amazing piece of writing, thank you, by half way through I was pretty overwhelmed by the emotional backbone of this. A dark pleasure to read. Can I steal that title to use in my vocab 4 day2day speak pls? E.g.- "Am having an Airplanes for stars kind of day.",, which will evolve to the point where all I will need to say is "Airplanes for Stars.".... Can`t think of any suggestions, Great Writing, Mistah Bear X
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Very, Very well written. I enjoyed reading this and i wish you the best of luck. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Interesting, really made me think. And I loved the way you wrote this piece. Keep up the good work and I hope the depression has gotten better.
Good luck
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wow. twisted...but lovely. emotional, angry, depressed...excellent write, tis wonderful!!! 5 stars (too bad they only have up to 3 applauses)
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8 outta 10
a true dark confessional, just the whole dark, seedy
truth written with passion, seething of hatred for
('what you have stolen of a wish' c opus) it's like
reading a diary: fine job with this piece...c opus
the title matters little as the work stood on its own.
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Wow!
Wow. This poem, did need a little spell check, but wow! I loved this poem. It is very very very deep. I really enjoyed reading it! Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck in my contest! -
forgot my applause
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i thought this was a good write...felt much emotion...two things
that iv'e fallen agian...(again)
and bacaues...(because)...
thank you for sharing -
Wicked
Confusing stars for airplanes is a wonderful way of telling the state of your mind, very creative. This is a very cool structure as well, easy to read and interesting. All in all, awesome. -
The title and that same line are fabulous, honestly. I like the first half of the poem a bit more than the second half, it seems to flow better to me for some reason. Obviously full of pain and heartache, it's good to get it out.
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A feel sad now. I have no clue what to say here. And yes all the stars are airplanes, because wishes never come true. Not for me, and not for you it seems.
There was a lot of emotion in this peice.
Good Luck!!
♥
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WOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love it love it love it! It's so creative and brilliant and.. depressing. But ity's so award-winning! Screw Maya Angelu, heres Caitlin Simmons!!!
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