I dont race my car
for the adrenaline rush
when it comes to drinking
im not a lush
I cant play and instrument
my singing isnt great
I dont own companies
my homeworks always late
I dont have a girlfriend who loves me
like by fate it was meant to be
my life has nothing that is great
nothing acoomplished
nothing to hate
ive done nothing astounding
nothing to great
I have no meaning
my lifes a fake
im sick beyond doubt
but im to scared to get checked out
afraid to die
life in doubt
twice a day I think of ways
to end my life
so much shame
I cant show my face
less than plan
more normal than ordinary
my life seems completly lame
only a dream of stardom and glory
and a love that seems less than only
a stuttering fool
no rhyme or reason
kill me now
sentece me to treason
I feel like i have nothing left to give
right now I barely have hope to live
her smiling face
gets me through the day
from the sun or moon
she shines like rays
a boy with a dream
losing hope in himself
full of doublt and pitty
and i dont cares from everyone else
ive done nothing great
i have no story to tell
form my place on earth
i seem to have fell
losing hope in what it seems
darkness fills my brighttist dreams
opening my eyes
seeing the lack of sucsess
am I being put to the test
for far to long ive claimed I am the best
but the truth is exposed
im nothing
a lie
im less thean the rest
Please tell me what you think
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Hey tyler. that was really good. you are such a good writer i am so happy to know you!! very very good.
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wow... this is really good tyler... i loved it your emotions are very powerful and protuding through this piece...
you know i love you and i'm always here for you tyler!!1
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sad
u mustent think that way to me your more than the rest. u know sometimes i think of u and u even give me purpose ive thought of killing myself here and there but i've got threw it and i've thought the same as u before, i think we all are here for a reason and you'll find it someday. and who knows you may not know when your purpose hits u. but don't give up hope i have faith in u. but this is a very good poem in a way but it's very very very sad.
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You lying sack of dog poo and you know it!
I HIGHLY disagree with with poem.
Being depressed is MY job damnit! Stop trying to steal it! You say you have done nothing yet I can easily counter that:
This boy is a wonder
Yet he feels so empty
Like darkness filling him up
I call him my Angel of Darkness
No matter what the problem
He is always there
To make sure we are cared for
And loved, he's there to listen
He says he cannot show his face
Yet it is not looks that matter
It's what he does, and how he acts
That gets him his friends and love
Tyler, you ARE loved, don't let depression get to you. that's bad. (Trust me I would know, you keep telling me that) Need I go back to our little inside joke, You stupid Pirate boneheaded brother of mine? Hmmmmmmmmm?? Just kidding. 
You know I love you. Don't make me prove it either, cause our other halves would get upset about that.
However, on the poem itself. You've written this well, and it shows how you feel. There is a bit of rhyme here and there (and you know I hate that, you did this purposely I KNOW it!). Although the title is fitting, I would have used something different. Nonetheless, Great Write. Keep it up.
-Melli-
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Shiver me Timbers...
Don't feel so sad
If the girl didn notice
It will happen
When you might not know it
But dont let your hopes go down
Don't leave um too high
Just put um in between
And always try and try.
Loves is a pirate
Who will find the way
He gets what he want
All the time everyday.
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very painful.
oh hunnie.
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this is a really well wrote piece of work. sorry my grammer aint great. oh well keep it up.
-sharon-
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