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Poetic Song

When stirrings of my soul begin

To urge the hand to move the pen

I’ll put in print a dreamer’s word

A simple song my heart has heard

 

A favored thought from long ago

May be the cause for ink to flow

Or beauty found on nature’s stage

Can put the words upon the page

 

A bit of humor that I’ve found

Across the paper dance around

With hope perhaps they will beguile

And bring about a happy smile

 

Or thoughts to entertain a child

At times across the page run wild

A journey to an unknown world

Come forth as pages are unfurled

 

But every piece of work I write

With meter loose or meter tight

Of verses short or verses long

Are part of my poetic song

Please tell me what you think

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  • Touchof1der gold member
    February 10, 2007

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    This is such a beautiful and lyrical piece of poetry. It has been a while since I have let my eyes wander across your pages. I am pleased to see that words of beauty and grace still flow so freely from your pen. Thank you for pleasure and honor of savoring your works once again.
    ♥ Touchof1der

  • SweetDawn
    February 9, 2007

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    This is beautifully written and expresses the heart of a written well. You've done an amazing job with poem. I love it. Great job.


  • lekha
    January 28, 2007

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    visited the site after a very long time this poem was very refreshing and like all your other work beautiful

    lekha


  • sunny day silver member
    January 24, 2007

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    sewasham, I found this entire piece warmed my heart as I reflected on what makes me write. Your words flow softly from pen to page as the rhythm and rhyme are superb and never forced. A poet receives inspiration from all that is around them and their heart lets them express it. It is very clear to see that your heart does your writing. From the title right to the very last word of this piece you showed what makes you who you are. The imagery was beautiful and it read like a song, the melody softly heard within my heart and mind. I want to thank you for sharing your wonderful gift with all of us. Kudos for you dear poet. Love and God bless, Joyce


  • Frozentearz gold member
    January 16, 2007

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    Great reflecting

    This was a great write and a great refelction on a writer and of yourself
    you have expressed this with a touch of a great writer
    well done and thanks for sharing,
    Warm thoughts
    Frozentearz

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    January 16, 2007

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    Nice.



    Should never stop writing that song. I believe that for poets each poem is a part of the soundtrack, or the score that is our life.




  • dustookie2
    January 16, 2007

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    What an awesome introduction it just sings and find i am hearing music in my head as i am reading. The lines unfold into a picture painted in the spoken word from your heart. This is a must for anyone who writes poetry a little theme song for us poor poets. Very nicely crafted Thank you for the pleasure Inspirational for when that dreaded block hits hard

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  • zochit2me gold member
    January 15, 2007
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    Great rhythem and flow here. The rhyme was right on. A good perky little poem here
    Becky

  • AislinnAurora
    January 15, 2007
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    Great job! It seems that it would be harder to write a poem about poetry, just as it is hard to write a story about a story. It's strange that my first response to the poem is that it would make a great poem to represent the site in general. I congratulate you on a great peice. Amazing job!

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  • EmeraldDreams silver member
    January 15, 2007
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    That was without a doubt one of my favourite pieces I have read on this site so far. That first stanza was simply beautiful. I think that if any writer or poet ever gets stuck for what to write, reading that would surely inspire them! Absolutely brilliant!

  • EmeraldDreams silver member
    January 15, 2007
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    That was without a doubt one of my favourite pieces I have read on this site so far. That first stanza was simply beautiful. I think that if any writer or poet ever gets stuck for what to write, reading that would surely inspire them! Absolutely brilliant!

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  • Thankfulspirit
    January 15, 2007

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    Such a beautiful and well crafted piece......flowed to perfection and proved to be a joy to read....great job here....keep the ink flowing...smiles, Terry

  • undyingservent
    January 15, 2007
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    interesting.... the ending is really rocky i would revise... it just does not flow at all.... particularly the last line... so keep working on this peace and try to think of how you can keep it as smooth as possible ok..... smooth..
    Love,
    Tim

  • Violet Moodswing gold member
    January 15, 2007

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    Great rhythm and natural feel to the rhyme. This is a wonderful look at the writing process and what motivates us to put the pen to paper.

    Nicely done

  • Anthony-
    January 15, 2007
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    I like the flow and rhythm of this piece. The words really do add to the movement and the mood of this piece. Well done to you - you have expressed a true sentiment about your writing of poetry. Anthony.
  • bushmandread
    January 14, 2007
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    Nice work.

    An apt description of the joy of writing poetry. Perfect cadence except for the next to last line. If you wanted to bring it to the 8-syllable meter, you could use "Of verses short or verses long"....just a suggestion. Clear and concise.....nicely done.


  • trynfinity
    January 14, 2007
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    I like this poem a lot. So true the words that you wrote for most poets anyway, it flows well doesn't seem forced or manipulated. You did a very good job explaining how we poets look at the words that we write, they are pieces of us not just words they are our own "poetic songs"

  • OOo AnGeL oOo
    January 14, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is a very beautiful peace, Everything flows to gether perfectly. I was entranced from the first paragraph. This poem rings true to you


  • xxxHallia
    January 14, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is really beautifully well written. It can really inspire people to write more. I also love how it rhymes. Good work and keep it up!


  • innocence jaded.xx gold member
    January 14, 2007

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    Amazing!

    Wow this is amazing! I can relate to this so much! I love how you put this whole thing together and the words you used were amazing! I really liked this piece I couldn't stop reading it!


  • AIias
    January 14, 2007
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    great!

    this is really good

  • BrightEyes-
    January 14, 2007

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    I really like this. Writing about writing really gets to me. It's so innocent, so pure, a really nice read. It flows so wonderfully, your rhythm is impeccable. Very nice.

    -mandy

  • Soulful Woman gold member
    January 14, 2007

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    I love this piece. It is truly the song of a poet. This flowed like a song...beautifully done...
    Soulful Woman


  • Bazza silver member
    January 13, 2007
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    Honest and sincere

    And wonderfully poetic songs they are . beautifully crafted my friend.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 13, 2007

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    Love it! I love your spirit Sewasham..Youthful,so pure, just so natural and flowing all through...No real motive for your writing, but to just pick up the pen and write as natually as you are...You are a delight to read, and as nice as the smile you show in your picture...You must be a delightful father, husband and friend...Wonderful write!
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