Tim was walking in the zoo
with his sons hank and bob
Tim asked bob "what sound does that animal make"?
"it goes moo"!
"no stupid" says the dad
which made hank rather mad
so hank climbed the fence!
on the other side he saw an animal and it looked rather sad
so hank wandered to the fury beast
hoping it wouldn't make him into a feast
he touched the animal and it flipped
and threw poop at him!
but then it looked right at tim
and threw a turd at the man
then tim threw a fit
and furiously killed it!!
and from now on tim was known as "the monkey hater of doom"!
Author notes
the most random weird insane poem i will ever write, but i did it... and im proud of it lol =p
A contest entry
- Suction Cup of DOOM! by StephMFP.
600 points, ended January 16, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow-ok then i'm kind of scared of crazy men who kill monkeys for no particular reason now....v_v *tear* i thought monkeys went moo..... *loljk*
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lol
tyvm for the comment! lol, its very appreciated
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^_^
ummmmm.....
this was an interesting poem. good form, good rythum.Just remember, there is a very fine between funny random and just plain immaturity.
good luck in the contest.
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hehe
to tell you the truth, i know it was pretty immature...but i tried to do something and i guess i wasn't in a poetic mood lol,but tyvm for the comment there allways appreciated by me!
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Aaargh! Spelling!
Well, you are right about this being WEIRD!
If you fix up all the spellings and typos, though, it would be nicer to read!
Line 3: 'Tom (Thought you said his name was Tim!) asked bob "what sound does that animal make"?'
Line 9: 'so hank wandered to the fury beast' (...?)
Line 10: 'hoping it woulden't (wouldn't) make him into a feast'
Lines 12, 14 & 15: 'through' should be 'threw'
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ok
i'll fix those but dont get too mad at me im 14 years old :-/ lol
o and his name was originally tom but i changed it and didnt catch that tom so i never changed it
"Line 9: 'so hank wandered to the fury beast' (...?)"
as in he saw that the animal was sad so he wandered to it too see why...=)
either way was it good?or just stupid
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WOW What do I say? I think there are no words for that.
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is that good lol?
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