Through the long dark hallway
an unusual boy happened to stray,
stumbling over uneven tiles
fatigued after countless miles.
Cobwebs stuck in his hair.
Insects biting him wherev'r they dare.
Snakes corkscrew and bats dance,
Waiting with impatience for this feasting chance.
Anxiety shadows hope's dimming flame.
Boy wondering how and when he came.
He continues, unable to grasp defeat.
More desparing with each beast he meets.
Alas, he sees a light through the darkness,
two doors mirrored of eachother's likeness
With renewed strength he ran for'ard.
Spirit, hope, and faith all soard.
A door on his left and right,
gloriously glowing, luminously bright,
but which door to choose?
Doesn't matter, he has nothing to lose.
Author notes
This is the first poem I wrote for an assignment in English. I decided that I didn't want the whole town thinking I'm dark and all that so I wrote a different one for the assignment. The assignment was cuplets, and I was unhappy with my "forward" and "soared" another reason to write a whole new one. I noticed that the poem changed tenses, from past to present. Does is sound badly? I appreciate any comments! Thank you!
tell me what you think
Comments
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I found this to be interesting, creative, and well written. Couplets are not easy, and your rhyme scheme works very well, without seeming forced. I liked it.
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fantastic
on the edge of my seat...very good
would love to see the movie...I like poems like this..
they seem to involve the reader brilliantly
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wow this is a great poem n u can so rhym
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I don't think it sounded bad at all. This was a very well done poem, and you should be proud of it. It was interesting and kept my attention. You were probably picking it apart so much because you were doing it for school, and you have to care what people think. Great job on this!!
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