onced silent screams filled the night
hidden secrets came undone
in my room i had sat thinking of you
and how you could've prevented what had happened to me
inside i was dying
consumed by rage
once beautiful dreams had turned to nightmares
my fear had been locked deep inside
and on the outside was an image of a happy teenage girl
who had only wished to please her parents
couldn't you see i had been calling for help
i became empty and broken
all my tears and scars were where no one had seen
all the voices had told me to take up the razzor
one last time
and so i had
and i had slit my throat
the ultimate mutilation
now as i sat there
falling deeper into the blackness
with the smell of my blood hanging strong in the air
my final thoughts were of you
and how you could've helped me
Author notes
option 3
- kids with screwed up parents or families group list • next in list
A contest entry
- six seconds is all you get. by noir eyes.
400 points, ended January 22, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sad Dark Depressing...... by Ntagatf.
400 points, ended February 23, 2007, 103 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Open to anyone and everyone! by Aidenn.
600 points, ended February 12, 2007, 82 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best Of The Rest by CapturedMoon.
700 points, ended May 25, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I little bit of imagination.... a stinkin' LOT of awsome poetry! by Demmy.
520 points, ended January 10, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you really have a serisouly deep sense of emotion in this it almost depressed me but i still love this to near every extent! your word choice is awsome!!!!!! an awsome write.
congrats on the silver and best of luck in the contest.
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WOW!
Nice on the silver! I liked it! great detail! i can almost smell the iron from here! lol... with such pain becomes great art? dont you think!
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Ah.
This is great.
Exactly the type of poem I was looking for.
Good luck in my contest.
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awesome poem i feel your emotion in it, i just loved reading it, i enjoyed this poem so much it was awesome
keep writing
~Ashley~<3 -
this is exactly how i feel every day of my life. heck screw makeing my parent proud, ive givin up on that. keep writing i swaer we share the same mind!
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did you enter my body to write this?
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This is a very good poem. Its very relatable to me. I personally love the last two lines, they finish off the poem softley and give it more depth. you are an amazing writer, and i really enjoyed this peice.
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i really liek this poem. ive felt liek that many times, and felt like doing it many times. you captured a lot of emotions, so keep up the good work =D
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been there and I know how it feels.
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*squirm*
gah...that poem made me squirm. I liked it though.
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PERFE CT
I really liked this poem. My sister used to cut herself but now she quit. She told me why she did it. I really like dthis poem because I know what you mean. I can relate to this. I know what it feels like, when someone who you have so much faith in just gives up.
Anyway, Here is your sweedish fish. *sweedishfish* Anyway, I also wanted to tell you that her and I are also Wiccan, and, yes, you spelled that right. 
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weeeeeeeeeeeeeee...i like cheese......and luv the poem
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dark
this is a very good poem and thank you for sharing it i can realy relate to this
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very well written i have already commented before i started my contest so i wish you the best of luck!! and again i know how you feel and i love it! how ever you have to chose a option and put it in your authors notes!!! thank you for entering my contest! Good luck!
~tearstaindangel~ -
hey this kc's mom
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im very sorry...but i must disqualify you...as my contest is now closed and you did not follow all rules..you did not tellme which option you picked and i enjoyed this poem but it would be unfair to the others if i did not disqualify you...however keep writting and thanks for entering my contest.
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dats grand
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oh man. this was very strong & dark. it held a lot of emotion in it. great job! thanks for entering &good luck. ♥
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this is how i also feel... you captured great emotions in this great write!!! keep up the good work!
~tearstaindangel~
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love it
dats cool it
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once beautiful dreams had turned to nightmares
that is something about all this that seem to hit me, i think it was this line. somewhere in my life i know what you mean, you did a great job keep it flowing and good luck in the contest -
Thats how I feel every time I don't talk to my girlfriend..... and every time she registers me for these stupid websites......
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