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A poet seeks the truth about Addiction

 

 

 

My mountain was made of paper; leaves; chemicals;

and the slow burn of addiction.

Its been several years now, since I set it in stone.

Wrote majestic poetry of how it nearly killed me, that

un-godly act of walking to Jerusalem with roughshod

eyes and heavy lungs.



 

I burnt you down-

made matchsticks out of your greed

with a snap of my thumb, I'd set you afire;

red dragons chased spittle from an open mouth.



 

Now, you are a painful scar

in my heart, a reminder of what not to do.

The very core of that mountainous ridge resides

in my brain. Occasionally, dreams blow chalkdust

to my lips; and I blow the top off the clouds

of a seared memory

away.

away.

 

 

 

 

And the poet licks the nib

scribbles inside the notepad on her desk

- a post-it to self; counts the years since she stopped.






 

 

 

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  • kvwriter silver member
    December 3, 2007
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    Haunting . . .

    Strong write here, Girl! Nice to read you again! And to see you! I view most scars as a good thing, as they are often reminders of what NOT to do and a blessing in that we just carry the reminding scar and go about the best way of living we can, instead of lying lifeless beneath earth and headstone. I'd rather have the scar. And, we all have them. Thank you for this. With your work, you can and do inspire many. Keep it up. Love and warm thoughts sent your way, Dear Friend! Be seeing you out and about now and again. Be blessed!--Kel

  • Nicolette gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    What I so admire about your poetry, Gill, is how you take the “ordinary things of life” and turn them into poetry – and that, my friend, is the sign of a true poet – which you are of course. Loved the metaphor of a mountain you’ve applied here...conquering addiction is indeed like climbing a mountain (something you and I know so well from our work experience), but this addiction was a personal one and I applaud your courage and your strength (just as I would applaud someone who gives us alcohol or drugs). The way to remove a mountain is by carrying away small stones, but it is never easy. You’ve taken us on a poetic journey from the foothills of this mountain to the wonderful view of freedom at the top, touching clouds of another nature now. A wonderful poem, my friend – thank you so much for this entry. And bravo to you!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • panegyric ink
    January 26, 2007
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    one word. Publishable. My Gosh, you really are one of the most inspirational and awsomed poets on AP!!! Everytime I come to visit, you either steal my heart or you touch it to see if it is still beating.


  • Whoochi gold member
    January 25, 2007

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    from one to another...

    From this addict to you...great piece of imagery and fulfillment...Kudos to you and this exceptional write....


  • misselaineous gold member
    January 21, 2007
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    Powerful writingindeed my friend
    you have captured the fraility of life; the power of resolve; and the strength it takes to give up anything that haunts us...
    if i could applaud umpteen more i would because you are here and that is what matters
    elaine


  • Zayra Yves gold member
    January 20, 2007
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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 20, 2007

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    And the poet licks the nib

    scribbles inside the notepad on her desk

    - a post-it to self; counts the years since she stopped.

    Indeed a great intriguing and entiched work by the great poetic heart here...So beautiful world of the sentiments and so beautiful world of its expression as well...you are touching and caressing the every feel of the self through tender touches of the past where there is only a single possibility for interpretting your place in the world of existence ...Indeed it is a very heartfelt journey of such rooms where you entered once but then what happened no body knows except you?...and this is the world of truth which you have penned here with your complete depth...a great write...

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  • ariosto silver member
    January 19, 2007
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    This is a marvelous poetic take on addiction.
    I've not had the monkey on my back...knock on wood...well coffee maybe, but I can surely feel it through your words in this piece.

    Good luck in the contest...some really terrific images

    D

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  • darrylblacksr
    January 19, 2007

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    Outstanding

    It's the rush you get from the smell of the paper and ink of the pen. The typical fix for a poet. Glad that you decided to share it and I wish you luck in your challenge...

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  • ian sawicki silver member
    January 19, 2007

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    ah addiction, i know it so well. a good poem, good imagery. spill a gin and tonic and twist it into a double whiskey while in love...

  • Elvis
    January 19, 2007
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  • Poetdontknowit
    January 19, 2007

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    GREAT

    I COULD BE A TWIN OF YOURS. I SO APPRECIATE THE POET WHO CAN TALK ABOUT THEMSELVES. IT'S VERY BRAVE, AND HELPS HEAL THE SOUL.
    KEEP ON PENNING
    POETDONTKNOWIT

  • kvwriter silver member
    January 19, 2007

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    Right on!

    I've seen this happen time and time again. Yet I still love, and I still caress and I still care and I never, ever, ever, quit trying. I have relatives who have conquered this and I know others can too. There is no such thing as "no hope."--Love to you, Dear Friend, and keep on doing what you're doing, because you are right where you need to be. Love you!--Kel

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    January 19, 2007
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    your 'tells' are beautiful. we are never perfect, never made to do and say what we should and so we learn.

    this shows strength and courage, both of which i have known you had. it shines through your words and echoes in the night to those who listen.

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  • Yvette Champ
    January 19, 2007

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    That this teaches and doesn't preach and that the scar is a the best scar to have as it is reminding what not to do is felt within this.The simple usage of away.away. really worked,the assertive character that fled red dragon painted this in the strength of weakness revealed and of coming out stronger and amen to that as now your poetry is not ever to be dulled by chemicals or chemical castration of live from life.Endearing and admired as you your yourself

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  • BlU-skOrPiOn
    January 19, 2007
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    Very beutifully written!!!
  • Joseph Gregory
    January 19, 2007
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    Quite Excellent

    Beautifully done.
    For an addict in recovery remembering is just as important as looking forward.


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 19, 2007

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    "The very core of that mountainous ridge resides in my brain." I'm proud of ya, Lady. I know how difficult it is to overcome anything of this nature & cigarettes are probably the worst of all. I agree with Jim's comment; it is far easier to do the wrong thing, it seems. The fact that you not only quit, but continue down this path of clarity is a testament to your strength of will & your character, my Friend...Good for you. Good luck in Nic's contest, Sweetie. Wanda

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  • -ButterflyCuts-
    January 19, 2007

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    This is beautiful. It really is.. and it's inspiring.
    Hmm.. I want to say more but not sure what yet..

  • Wandika gold member
    January 19, 2007
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    Tough Road

    It is always a tough road once clean. We know so many other shortcuts.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      January 19, 2007
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      aye.... mine was ciggies... still an addiction but luckily i've been stopped nearly 2 and half years now

  • Annalise
    January 19, 2007
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    Oh, how I know.

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