Smile pretty,
you're breaking down
smile for the world
don't show them frown
hide those tears behind that smile
end their pile of questions
Our insecurities painted on
with red lipstick smudged
and an eyeliner disaster
Printed on smile
and lies fit so well
we put on that fake smile
and we've got you fooled
Imperfections show like no tomorrow
true feelings showing through
smiles losing their shine
and make-up disasters
of lies becoming truths
Smile pretty,
you're breaking down
smile for the world
don't show them frown
hide thoes tears behind that smile
end their pile of questions
As our smiles aren't the perfection
our lives become the best addiction
we live for impression
and our lives are the best session of gossip
their expectations are unimaginable
Author notes
why do we all worry about what we look like?
why do we look like how everybody else wants us to?
isnt it all just to hear someone say "your pretty"?
or something along the lines?
i think looking different from everyone else is perfect.
if you like the way you look then who cares what other people think?
if they dont like what you look like they dont have to look at you.
everybodys a clone...
(id imagine it sounding somewhat like evanescence... or something similar? not sure...)
A contest entry
- Flawed To Perfection by tara wilson.
450 points, ended January 26, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a really well written poem, i love the questions you have brought up within your poem and author comments.
Its great how you repeat;
Smile pretty,
you're breaking down
smile for the world
don't show them frown
hide thoes tears behind that smile
end their pile of questions
i really like this poem, congrats on agreat write
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smiles and frowns, we all juggle them constantly each and every day, a good poem. i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill drink and twist me a lemon into the crazy shape of love...
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i love your poem/song, and how you repeat the one verse. the lines
"Our insecurities painted on
with red lipstick smudged
and an eyeliner disaster"
are my favorite; i can totally picture what you're talking about. this poem/song is just so true and easy to relate to.
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I like this poem, but line four I think should have been A frown. I can relate to this also. I think this poem describes a lot of people. I really like the last line, it pulls the whole poem together in my opinion. I also agree with you on the whole pretty thing. I went through a phase where i tried to be a barbie clone. But after about two weeks, I was like f this it ain't me. I don't think people should put so much time into worrying about what other people think. Anyway, i really like this poem because it puts the point across
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this was great. BUt i aslo think looking different for looking different's sake is just as bad as "being a clone." Just be who you are (though who we are is often lost in other people's opinions). keep it up. loved the refrain
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Oh cool, this would sound good as an evanescence song!
Also, found one more thing your - should be you're as in you are breaking down. Thanks for making the edits as I know you didn't have to and thanks for helping me hear the song! I thought everybody's a clone would make a good title. I really like this, it's very close to what I was looking for. -
I would like to see you use 'everybody's a clone', actually, in your poem/song, title? because that was good. I like your theme for this contest. A few spelling errors: those tears, tomorrow, losing their shine, and don't, and aren't. I like 'our insecurities painted on'. Good lyrics all around. Could you put in your author's box who you would hear/imagine singing this? (like what type of style of song) Only if you really want to, you don't have to, I'm just curious because I really like lyric poetry.
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mmk all edited
thanks for your comment :]
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Wow. This was true and really kind of optimistic but dark. I liked the flow of it all. Plus the meaning that speaks out of it really stays there. When you just feel like everything revolves around perfectionism and those sappy lies told it gets confusing. Well done and welcome to AP.
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Nicely said
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