Once again its taken over me
body shaking, can barely see
I remember telling myself 'no'
but it was there, i had to have a go
How can i stop what i crave?
when its master and i its slave?
no matter how hard i try to ignore it
it takes over my insides, and doesn't quit
I wish i was stronger so i could hold back
yet thats a quality i seem to lack
I could scream its all over and done
but it wont go away till its won
It ruined my life so much i ache
to even think of starting was a mistake
i did a job and now ill pay
i only wish the craving went away
Author notes
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Written June 7th, 2003
A contest entry
- Drug Addiction by isa.
300 points, ended April 13, 2004, 35 entries
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so true... master will soon release you :*
First time I have read this.... wow ... theres so much truth in it... it's not even funny....
girl you have a way with words...
~kim~
I am so glad I quit that shit... I think I have been clean for about as long as you now.... I don't know some where around 4 months maybe more... it seems so long I don't even keep track any more.... but i am addicted to weed and that is why I am going to rehab right now its out patient rehab.... later days.
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Thank you for entering this piece in my contest. good luck with it.
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i thought the flow of this poem was good and it kept me going - the steady pace made me feel like it was more focussed - like this character really wanted to stop and knew she should stop but just couldnt.
I loved the way you expressed the pain of doing drugs and the effects that it can have on the mind and the body - a lot of people just talk about the physical addiction itself where we all know that really - the real pain comes with the mental knowledge that there is something you shouldnt do but must. e.g
I remember telling myself 'no'
but it was there, i had to have a go
good lines
Well done and i hope you do well in the contest - i'll read some more of your stuff later on and shall look forward to it
Spencer -
great flow and great conveyal. could really relate to this. this poem defenitly says exactly how you feel and walks through it really well.
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HEy i like you poem what was your addiction
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Good Poem
I love this poem, your style of writing is almost exactly like mine. Nice rythm and flow, good wording. -
i like it!
Nice. Very powerful poem. Good write!
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Powerful
Powerful.Well done.Bill -
*nods* Mhmm, I know exactly what you mean. Same theme to my "Hopelessly Craving" poem. Oh, poor us, we can't fight it, can we? Anyways, good job! Love you.
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Nicely put...thanks for sharing
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