This must be a melody of sweet melancholy
that sets free these tears upon my cheeks
O' they are so warm, they comfort me
with a soothing feeling of sweet relief
that one only gets when love abounds faithfully.
The goddess of the night blushes in awe
The pacific has never been so wise and calm
where the spirit and the flesh live in harmony
our hopes and beliefs no longer seem as a myth
and where peace reigns, love sails like shooting stars
In my heart I keep from you no secrets
I tell you everything, those you love even those you hate
See through my soul, my righteous steps and my past mistakes
Tell me when I'm acting dumb even when it may hurt
and praise my worth with hugs and kisses when I do Okay.
Embrace me in your arms and calm me,
rest my head upon your shoulder and assure me,
tell me what I'm feeling is not an infatuation
you know of my vulnerability, my obsession and addiction
and without you, o' darling, I'm lost in perdition
I've seen flocks of all sorts, and doors that always stay shut;
birds without a perch to rest and wanderers without a nest.
like the sun that rises with hope and later sets with a promise
your presence within me intoxicates me like a sunset breath
Where roses die before its thorns, life dies to later rusurrect
Maybe it is the sweetness or the fragrance of the flower
that turns a bee into a drunken lover.
The very core of your excitement touches my sensibility of breathing.
In my heart, I gather stars, through my eyes, I pour out rains
you must be of Heaven sent, in your sanctuary, my soul repents
I shall love you and shelter you like dust shelters a living breath.
Author notes
We love our crazymomma
A contest entry
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1000 points, ended May 31, 30 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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beautiful write full of love i loved it much great work keep it up...
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Congratulations on your two prior silver wins, this is a beautiful write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Lovely write, i love your similes and metaphor,
you are very talented
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This is a breathtaking poem, WoW!
So happy to read this...
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Absolutely breathtaking.
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"your presence within me intoxicates me like a sunset breath
Where roses die before its thorns, life dies to later rusurrect" those are nice lines.
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Absolutely beautiful, nothing more I can say.
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I love this
"Embrace me in your arms and calm me,
rest my head upon your shoulder and assure me,
tell me what I'm feeling is not an infatuation
you know of my vulnerability, my obsession and addiction
and without you, o' darling, I'm lost in perdition"
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I just wanted to say that was a beautiful poem
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a moving piece
Just diffusing al thoughts of love...
A wonderful poem..makes one feel very personal.. -
This is the most beautiful poem I have ever read
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EXCELLENT
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EXCELLENT
"See through my soul, my righteous steps and my past mistakes
Tell me when I'm acting dumb even when it may hurt
and praise my worth with hugs and kisses when I do Okay."
wow! I am greatly attached to this poem, never thought that such one could make me feel emotional, I have fallen in love before but yep, you portrayed this much better compared to my other love poems...
haha.... keep on writing, I like your simile, it is beautifully used....
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Brillient!
you capture the love so beautifully. this is my fav part
I've seen flocks of all sorts, and doors that always stay shut;
birds without a perch to rest and wanderers without a nest.
like the sun that rises with hope and later sets with a promise
your presence within me intoxicates me like a sunset breath
Where roses die before its thorns, life dies to later rusurrect
that sooo deep
Maybe it is the sweetness or the fragrance of the flower
that turns a bee into a drunken lover.
OMG perfect ending i love it WTG@!!!!
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i read half of it... and what i read of it was awesometastic!
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Re: Lovesick
Very nice romantic poem! I like it a bunch! It says so much. It has a lovely treatment of the chosen subject and the title is just great. Very good use of and choice of words! This poem speaks volumes of emotion and feeling.
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wow that one had some power behind it very nice
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I love intensely romantic poems and tales, this is so eloquently penned with such a wealth of undiluted passion. Well done, for the romantic in us all.
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I never did actually comment on this piece. You changed it though I liked the other version better.
But,
All these contests well congrads on the two silver trophies that you won.
Line upon line in the poem just esculates I can't even pick out a favorite line because every word grows into the next word and its just an awe for words this is a beautiful write and is filled with your originality. I think that is why you possess so much talent your words and metaphores are original and only yours. And whomever originally inspired this piece from you had your heart or still may.
Amazing work!
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oh! that was sad and well writen I love it thanks for entering
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Very good write.
The title fits this piece very well.
Awesome job.
-Mandi
Good luck in contest.
I see you have won Silver on several occassions.
Well deserved my friend!!!
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Very vivid and wonderful imagery you have created in these words. This was so sweet and romantic. I sometimes feel "drunk" on love too. Thanks for entering and good luck
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this is really great! nice work
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nice write! thanks for the entry
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thanks for joining contest
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I agree with your title, it fits really well. A lot of emotions, and I know I've felt this way before. I liked the reference to the goddess, nice. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Truly beautiful
A great piece of writing here, lots of luck in the contest.
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this is absolutely beautiful. such wonderful imagery! great job!
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This was very sweet. It is obvious you're in love. Although the way it was layed out isn't usually my style I enjoyed this poem. It was beautiful.
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sweet and lovely. It is obvious the love bug got a bite out of you. The imagery was quite nice. I did find it a bit long for my tatse but was able to make it to the end
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This is a a lovely poem. Filled with expressions befitting a poem of love... or anything 'almost like being in love'
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Love sick maybe... love struck yes!
This write is one of the best that I have been able to read in such a long time! Each line was dripping with imagery of love. It made me cry in places! The metaphores flow so wonderfuly..
This is a beautiful write.. keep up the great penning!!
Thank you for letting this wonderful write be read!!
~*Cristy*~
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Words of Love
Your poem, each single line
speaks of love, spoken as
the gentle caress of a lovers
fingers, the tenderness of loves
first kiss, and of love undying
for the stars of Heaven itself
to feel.
Thank you, for this beautiful piece
of a true Masterpiece. Best of luck to you.
Riftkin
. Rewarded 6
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very poignant, and fitting for this contest! Nice job!
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stunning!
wow! this took my breath away!!
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I think that you did an amazing job on this! Kudos!
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This is lovely and sweet. I love the imagery, metaphores and flow in this poem. So sweet and so true. Loved it! Thanks for sharing
. Rewarded 4
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nice write
it's very deep
i LOVE the last 2 lines!!
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nice write
very deep
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Reading comments below, I cannot add much. I enjoyed the read each time going over it. One thing that strikes me (not mentioned below) is the use of "Pacific" and it's placement. It seems to colour all that follows, and live up to it's name.
If there is any change at all that I would make, it would be to remove as many words as possible. But then, I am not you
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In my heart, I gather stars, through my eyes, I pour out rains
you must be of Heaven sent, in your sanctuary, my soul repents
I shall love you and shelter you like dust shelters a living breath.
Maybe it is the sweetness or the fragrance of the flower
that turns a bee into a drunken lover.
I loved this stanza.
I loved how used used a bee to describe this.
You are so unique.
. Rewarded 8
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love this poem so real and deep it clams real love and hope.... i love i
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Maahvalous!!!
Simply marvelous! Such eloquent mataphor and outstanding imagery flows into a brilliant masterpiece here. "Lovesick" will surely earn a shiny cup to display on your deserving muse's table today, O Wise Poet!! Great job!!! Peace, Cyn
. Rewarded 4
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good luck in the contest! good write
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a very sweet poem
sounds alot like love
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Love is, someone to calm you, someone to gently chastise you when you are wrong and most of all someone to forgive you.It seems you have found all these qualities in you love.i hope you cherish them, Ros
. Rewarded 4
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All my life I thought angels were a myth, till I found you upon the cispy sands. In hopes of loves promise, I wish you the best...how could she say no...after a poem such as this! wow...~Sie
. Rewarded 4
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sounds like love - sick. good work here. good luck in the contest too. I can see a lot of effor t went into this piece of poetry.
. Rewarded 4
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good
Embrace me in your arms and calm me,
rest my head upon your shoulder and assure me,
tell me what I'm feeling is not an infatuation
you know of my vulnerability, my obsession and addiction
and without you, o' darling, I'm lost in perdition
In my heart I keep from you no secrets
I'll tell you everything, those you love even those you hate
See through my soul, my righteous steps and my past mistakes
Tell me when I'm wrong even when it may hurt
and praise my worth with hugs and kisses when I do more than Okay.
this was the part of your poem that touched me the most thanx it was great
. Rewarded 8
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Beautiful!!
This is really good, I love the last lines, so pretty! Love it!
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Beautiful, the last lines are wonderful, smooth rhyme and flow and wonderful romantic imagery. Best of luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing this!
. Rewarded 4
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Maybe it is the sweetness or the fragrance of the flower
that turns a bee into a drunken lover.......
.....or maybe its just your poetry.
stunningly beautiful (as usual)
Jamie
. Rewarded 4
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So beautifully written.
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"This is the truth, I don't blaspheme
wipe not the tears that fall upon my cheeks
they are so warm, they comfort me"
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Nice to see that someone is in love deeper than the depest blue ocean! wonderful poetry and whats this that your leaving AP ??? this is the second time I ran into a wonderful poet that wants to quit, tell me why MR????
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Very nice....Good luck and thanks for entering!
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VERY NICE
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There's no doubt, you love this woman! This is well written and very passionate. Good job!! FAH
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Such a loving write!!!! Thank you so much for entering it and good luck!!!!
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Very good! I love how you wrote it! Good luck in the contest!
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I had to applaud this again
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WOW! THAT WAS HOTT! OH my goodness, I'm str8 blushin yo'. This is soooo goood. How long have you been writing poetry?
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Classy Indeed
I really liked this my friend, wow you have such stamina for Love and it shows from deep within. Gr8 write I am sure you will do well in this Contest.
Piff
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Wow. Very nicely done. I love your writing style, how everything is a little bit metaphorical, such as "in my heart I gather stars, through my eyes, I pour out rains". It's like using everything really good about a cliche to enhance the poem which is very powerful and effective.
Loved this poem. Only thing you may want to change -- six lines from the end, "surpases" should be "surpasses" =]
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Honest and raw. These emotions feel as though they're straight from the heart; they're beautifully real. I love the simple power of "my love for you is insane" and also the description about the bees & flowers.
This poem is a gorgeous & unique way to say 'I love you.'
Thanks so much for entering.
DancingRed.
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Dammit sexy Mackintoch why don't you just bring that ass here!
All kidding aside this is a beautiful write! Don't stay away this time I need your beautiful words to carry on! 
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