In my dreams is where I see you
In my dreams you're still around
In my dreams is where I go to meet you
Only there your voice is more than just a distant sound
In my heart is where I keep you
A memory I will always hold dear
Even though I wish night and day
That you could still be here
Even though deep down I know
That you have gone to a good place
It's still hard getting through each day
Knowing that never again will I get to see your face
Never again will I sit with you
Never get a hug from you when I cry
I just can't deal with the fact
That we had to say goodbye
Goodbye to a person
Who gave her life and family her all
Goodbye to my hero
That would catch me when I fall
Goodbye to my nana, my friend my angel
Who made me the woman I am now
I know she'd be looking down from heaven
I know that she would be proud
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Please tell me what you think
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this is such a heart felt poem. i love how u use so much emotion in your writing. although i dont know your nana, i know she would of been proud of you. good job.
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Absolutely heart-rendering poetry, Mara. I knew coming to this poem it would be of your grandmother, and though the poem can be read on so many levels of love for another who is gone, it's a beautiful tribute to the woman you love and will carry within you always.
Hoping you and the baby and all have been well. It's been forever since we've been in touch, and I'm sure the baby is cuter than ever!
Jo
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Beautiful Mara,
I have missed your words so
and it is so lovely to see your poem is about the beautiful woman who guides and protects you and your Emma
This is a wonderful write darlin
Stay safe
Much love
~Amanda
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Amazing emotions, very deep write. I absolutly love this poem and how you expressed yourself so well in it without the need to use strong words. just simple and easy coming from the heart. Amazing job!!
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The true love of family
How sweet that Nana is the one you remember so for in life and the everafter those who love you watch over you so. Let her inspiration bring to light what is in you that you already know, share this love one day with your own little one's that Nana might liveon in thier own dreams and poetries.
I like It, I like It so.
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wow i love how much emotion you put into this poem! im so sorry you had to lose someone you loved so much! my favorite part was when you said
"Goodbye to a person
Who gave her life and family her all
Goodbye to my hero
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That was very sweet and hearfelt. I think that she would be proud as well I am sorry for your loss and heartache and I hope that in time it will heal. lovely poem. and all my best wishes to you.
may your nana rest in peace
>>>>gaiascully<<<<
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excellent
This really through me in an emotional loop... it's sad. I love this peace because it is filled with emotion. Wonderful rhyme over all you have a excellent poem
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Very Very deep. I absolutely love it.
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awww. thats so sweet and geogous. it was interesting the way you used repeditive words inthe first stanza but discarded that int he second stanza. at first i thought it was to a lost love, then a partner who has passed on. and when you said Nana it was so beautiful. i dont get along with my Nana (either of them) because she has Schizophrenia and doesnt know who any of her grandchildren are, or even most of her own children. its sad but my best is to her.
i sorta envy the way you speak of such love to your nana, (i love mine and all. you just have to mentally stepback everytime she tries to kick you out of the house) its so sweet and wonderful. Nana's are a wonderful thing in this world when they are like your nana.
and may she RIP
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Now I'm all teary eyed. I'm very sorry. This was very touching. She would be very proud.
Much love,
MJ
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wow
great poem filled with emotions and feelings i actaully felt it while reading its so swweet well writtenbut the end is suchhh painful:S alots losing someone speciall:S
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Truly heartfelt poem. May I say something about the ending:I know she'd be looking down from heaven
I know that she would be proud
I think that it should read like this:I know you'll be looking down from heaven
I know that you are really proud
But that may be just. Your poem is terrific.
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that really sucks to lose a person that you love and who you look up to so much...
In my heart is where I keep you
A memory I will always hold dear
Even though I wish night and day
That you could still be here
This is definitely my favorite stanza, keep it up! great poem.
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Great
lovely dreams you have of nana...she sounds like a wonderful person ...you are so lucky to have had her in your life ...your poem read well...emotional it was ...moved me ...peace katie -
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Missing someon like that is so hard. In the beginning I felt exactly those words as if I was in it. Exceot I related it to my unrequited love.ugh -
It's never easy to say goodbye to someone you love. Beautiful composition of it! I like the repetition--I think it's a nice affect. But change it if you want. Either way, remember: It's YOUR poem. It should say and feel what you want it to say and how you want it to feel. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Take care.
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This is a great poem, a nice tribute to your nana whom I'm sure would be very proud. I don't know how to critique this poem other than to say in the first stanza there was a bit to much repetition. A little is good but overdoing it would make it bland and stale, and I'm sure you wouldn't want that. Any way, overall a great job and keep writing.
Tiphanie -
beautiful, sucha loving tribute, as it brought memories of my mother, as she was most beautiful woman i have known. Thanks for the memories.
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oh how twisted, in a good way. wow didnt se how this was going to play out. magnificent penning here. Bravo to a talented poet.
Tory
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Excellent Poem
Good poem Keep on writing i liked it!Has good choices of words and rhyme.Keep up the good work!Lisa K Haslett raytown Missouri! -
Oh what a beautiful poem! a wonderful twist, you have so much talent, I can tell just from this poem!!
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