hey there little one,
so tender, so mild.
its me the oldest
also known as the first born child
the excitement and anticipation
is so dreadful for me. for its
hard to picture you and me.
mom and dad are quite the couple
you'll see.i think they have a name
pick out, sounds like Christine.
When you arrive there's no need to
fret. for your big sis is here to help
you to help you get set.
The real world isn't that scary you know?
There's all types of fun things and weird
things for here to be shown.
Don't worry lil sis about all these things
right now? For it's my job and mom and dads
job to show you how.
I'll let you sleep easy though i dont know if
that's easy to do. For there is a new and
exciting world just waiting for you
Author notes
Well i tried to put this from my sisters point of view of how she felt when i was born, im the youngest. and i think she wanted to sell me i'm not sure. but i dedicate this to her
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This sounds like a very nice and thoughtful poem. I don't know if this is how you see or if its how it is or not but since you are the youngest it should be the responsibility and privilege of the older siblings to watch out for and care for their younger siblings. Great job!
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I think this is kind of how my brother felt... it's funny, when I was only a few weeks old, I was crying one night and before my mom got in the room my brother had me up on his shoulder, holding me by the feet, patting me on the butt to calm me down... I find that story funny... but anyway, you did a good job writing this. Thanks for the entry. Best of luck!
CrimsonViper -
Nice
Very nice sentiments the contents are very good, but, some suggestion for the flow is not so good,
Stanza 4
" When you arrive there
is no need to fret,
for big sis is here
to help you get set"
Stanza 6
" Don't worry lil sis
about all these things right now,
for it is my job and mom and dads
to show you how"
Stanza 7
" I'll let you sleep easy
though I don't know if that's easy to do
for there is a new
and excitng World just waiting for you!"
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haha "I think she wanted to sell me"
I'm the youngest as well.. and that's a very unique approach. I never thought to write from my sisters' POVs
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