It's time I made clear this statement
rolled my sleeves up, took off the glove
it's time you knew what this date meant
time to admit to you my love
I've made this known to loves before
let them know of my affection
with just three words, no less no more
leaving scars in my reflection
The moment's here, gaze in my eyes
break the pause with strong defiance
"I love you"... I wait, then I despise
the lengthy deathly stone cold silence
Those three damned words I can't repeat
and here I'm in this scene again
eyes look at floor - shuffled feet
What did I expect from this man?
Awkward quiet, well it could be worse
although I want to hide and cry
this sad moment I cannot reverse
but silence is better than a lie
Author notes
Take another chance Irene. What the hell eh?
Mothandrust "taught 'em I love you"
Please tell me what you think
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What a heart breaker of a poem! So very very raw and sad, brittle like the moments between before and after when the words hang there like big teeth ready to smile in reply or bite you in two. This really moved me, and so many can reolate-but don't shy from the words, they're the best ones we ever invented. the ending was really strong too-great write.
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stoppin in to say hi and let you know i like your poem here also. take care.
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not bad
right place wrong time................again!!!!...chin up lol. nice flow and in all a nice piece
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I can relate to this piece...one-sided love ain't no peaches 'n cream...
I've had this happen to me some time ago...
Awkard silence is the pits!!
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Hate that awkward silence!!!
If I'm getting the last line right, silence is better than them telling you they love you too.. and not meaning it?
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i like this poem its very heart felt and true! i like the idea behind it i really did well good work
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I love this poem . That awkward silence can definitely be kind of shattering to someone when telling them you love them and get no response returning the feeling or otherwise . Great write hun and very heartfelt . I can relate to this as its happened to me in the past . Keep up the great writing .
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I like the flow, I like the rhyming, its passionate and powerful!!! Thank you for entering and good luck!
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whoa
Wow, what a change of pace from your normal happy go lucky style. I really liked this one. I think this one is my favorite
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this was so well writen
i like all of it
you wrote this and i felt it it in my heart
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oh that's so sad! awkward silence indeed. i loved the ending, that little bit of silverlining. i liked the beat and feel to the poem. "leaving scars in my reflection" that was one of my favorite lines....absolute lovely poem. keep writing!!
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I love this poem and i can feel where you are coming from in this poem thank you sooo much for entering my contest and good luck!
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This flows from start to end, I enjoyed reading. Brilliant poem
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I greatly enjoyed reading this poem. My personal favorite stanza was the 2nd one:
"I've made this known to loves before
let them know of my affection
with just three words, no less no more
leaving scars in my reflection"
and the last line, silence is better than a lie. Indeed. Sometimes saying nothing means so much more than saying anything at all. A truly outstanding poem. -
Stunned...yep...stunned...you had me right to the very end and then, wham...this is a terrific write for men or women...you have a great talent for making a point of what seems to be obvious then turning it back on its head...I love this one...I don't feel great with the third line, first stanza, something not quite right with 'what our fate meant' because it's so past tense, whereas the rest is in the present tense...but can't think of a better offering just now...Good luck in the contest...Peace, Rhonda
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that was nice. But it leaves me full of questions.
not really questions that needed to be answered in the poem itself.
but it makes me wonder, what exactly happened...like the details.
you told what happen in the fewest words, but thats what makes it good.
great write..
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