OVER THE EDGE
She waits eagerly for me to enter the room
Heart beats uncontrollaby as she hears my footsteps
I can smell the scent of her perfume throughout the hall
I enter to find her already naked and sprawled out across the bed
I anxiously drop my briefcase and quickly undo my belt
She crawls over to me and teasingly slaps my hands away
She eagerly opens up and devours my manhood
Wondrous sensations run throughout my entire being
She looks up at me and passionately winks her eye
I push her hair back behind her head and push myself deeper into her
She cooes, quickly stands up, and pushes me onto the bed
I enter her dripping lips with my powerful thrusts sending her over the edge
Author notes
Picture Prompt
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF 12 Entries x 12 Lines x 30 Minutes by intanglio2ring.
450 points, ended October 1, 2007, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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So Sensual
Wow! Jeremy, this write has blown me away...
Your words are so soft and tender.
The write is very sensual and written in great taste.
I am in awe of such sensuality that you have woven into your write.
I stand up to give you my standing ovation on a poem well written and laced with loves emotion and tenderness.
You have provided the reader with such beautiful sensual images.
Your words are soft and they wrap around the heart of the reader as they read your poem, making them feel the love and the desire of need, that you have penned.
In my own opinion, when a reader can see and feel the story behind the written words, then this tells me that it is a great piece of work written.
You my friend have done just that, and it was a true pleasure reading you.
Thank you for sharing such beautiful thoughts and allowing us to hear your words of love and desire.
Take care my friend and know that you are being sent much love and happiness.Your loving friend in poety, ~Angel-Anne~
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What a Title!!!
And - "ahem"
What a write!
Looks around for a briefcase to switch out!
Thanks for the great entry!
Tang
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Boy it got hot all the sudden. Very nicely done. You have captured a seductive scene so very tastefully with your words. A beautiful take on the prompt. The flow was smooth as silk. Loved it. Good luck in the contest.
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WOW, beautifully seductive and sensual. A wonderful take on the beautiful picture.
Great flow and meter. A excellent read.
Thank you for sharing!
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