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Storm and Calm

Without hope's oars, adrift on shallow griefs,

and swamped by sudden squalls of doubt and fear, 

shall I be taken by the tug of time's

strong tide out of the citied harbour near

your farming hand, out to the mountain swell

and drowning waves of that engulfing sea

where hope's horizon circles with no land,

where left and right are meaningless directions

and North and South stretch to the same conclusion? 

I cannot answer you the easy question.

While your words recede on every hand

my tongue unlearns the words of explanation

nor have my thoughts the finger-strength to straighten

the question mark into an exclamation.

Between the flocks and shoals of fish and gull

my hand can steer no helm to any haven

nor stretch the tenting cloud-sail to a harbour.

Drawn on a spiral to the dragging centre,

the drowning worldpool of my wanting nature

wherein my fleet of fragile word-crafts wreck 

there in the hollow dark of my swift future -

the words that you have spoken for my sake

are windlost in the surge of turning water.

The turning stars are spinning as you speak.

But be!

But be!

But be and stars may stay.

Though towing tides may tug, their waters slip

and loose their heaving hold.  The steadied deck

may turn again against the weather's check.

But be, that storming clouds unmask the moon -

the tide will still and turn, the wind will fail.

Your lodestar love will lead my seeking prow

back through dread and hazard - guide the hull

beneath the rocky headland of my fear,

below the homing land's returning hill

back to the easy harbour of your care.

Then, for your sake, the weather will be still

and fish and gull sail at the mast and keel.

Within your reaching hands the dawn shall break,

your breath of love will anthem in the sail

and all the hills be haven

for your sake. 

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  • I really like this. A tad long and wordy but you can really feel the love. I like it. It is very sweet.
    Maybe a little wordy you know but still good.

    Thanks for entering my contest
    Nikki
  • ahhh very relatable I think... I need love to keep me going, even though that I feel like giving up on it.
    The first line by the way is a different font to the rest, didn't know if that was on purpose or not, just pointing it out.

  • LucyInTheSky
    March 20

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    this is absolutely beautiful. the last six lines are so perfect. thank you so much for entering, i have no critic! keep up the good work.
  • a well writen poem unfortunetly you used the word love twice and so im going to have to remove it from the cometition sorry but the prompt clearly states the words not to use, if you were to change it or enter another poem that would be fine, thanks for entering though
  • This is more of story then a poem, which I have nothing against. I love it just the same, poems that tell a story are hard to do well, but obvisouly not hard for you.

  • Nicotine Eyes
    February 15
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    Nicely done. Congratz on the HM. Thanks and good luck!

  • M a r l u x i a
    February 1

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    As I read this, it reminds me of some fiction stories, so nicely organized in structure and order, and nicely written out. Good job.


    Thanks for entering A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S! Good luck!

    M a r l u x i a

  • Pureisolation
    January 25

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    i like your choice of words in this poem, it has alot of imargry that i like that. thank you for sharing it.

  • Sia
    January 18
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    Thanks for entering!!!!

    Very well written, and beautiful choice of words. Good luck in the contest ^_^ @>}-

  • Crayon.Ninja
    January 15

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    Good job. It's lengthy, which is something I don't really see much of any more. Sometimes I come across poems only two lines long. It seems really traditional to me and I'm glad I read it.


  • Ellis gold member
    December 28, 2007
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    Excellent Writing -- Encouragement

    A relationship of love sets right (i.e.- calms fear and doubt).
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  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    December 19, 2007

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    this has lots of emotion and is very well written thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest, I liked the rhythm of this write and the way it flows with such emotion. I like tha way that this shows just enough to keep a person guessing
  • Stu Pididiot
    December 11, 2007

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    Exceptional

    How this fabulous piece of poetry hasn't yet won a contest is beyond me. Your innate metaphorical sense is displayed here with great depth and poignancy, and your masterful handling of a host of poetic devices is brilliant. Keep up the wonderful works, and best of luck in the contest. You're the real deal, no doubt about that.

    David Michaels


  • lindaburns
    December 11, 2007

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    Comments by Judge

    I see you have used your poetic license a couple of time here with worldpool and windlost. The words fit perfectly.
    dictionary.com doesn’t have a listing for “griefs”. Are you saying more than one “grief”? “may turn again against the the weather's check.” extra “the”
    If you will take out the extra “the” by 12-12-07, I can promise you at least honorable mention.


  • Birgitte gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    "Your lodestar love will lead my seeking prow

    back through dread and hazard - guide the hull"
    I love those lines! This piece is just beautiful, intense and speaks of so much truth! I really like it. Good job!

  • Dorcha Runda
    November 23, 2007
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    beautiful and so very true. i love it. thanks for your entry and good luck.

  • Avatar of Innocence
    November 18, 2007

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    I was enthralled by the desperate intensity of this poem. The poem's construction which reflects the thrashing tempestuousness of storm to the calm resignation of a dependable love is astounding. I was amazed by the simplicity of the poem, the illustrations of being lost and torn from any semblance of comfort were effective.

    I could smell the brine and sweat and I could almost taste the saltwater and tears that radiated from this poem.

    The feeling was somewhat diminished by the last line. It was a fine last line, but it was not as provocative as the rest of the poem, it just sort of ended. There was nothing left to hope for. I sure understood the context of why it was stated so straightforwardly, but I felt empty because I read it.

  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    I am never certain about your poetry. If I were writing a list of what I like in poetry you hit many but not all of them.
    But each poem seems to hit the spot. This is terrific, thank-you very much for the read.

    . Rewarded 4


  • light insight silver member
    November 17, 2007

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    Lost For Words

    I can't imagine anyone reading this without feeling it was writtenfor or about them. Very profound and insightful words. Speaks of experience not imagination. Very nice piece.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Emily Jo
    November 17, 2007
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    This is wonderful. I really like it. Very very very goood. Keep writing, this is...whoa

  • Yvette Champ
    November 17, 2007
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    Good usage of grammar,alliteration and assonance.The metaphor is carried smoothly throughout with emotion that never wanes.The title is apt and pertinent as an introduction and as part and parcel of the poem.The piece deserves to be read aloud and given breathe too,this would be wonderful to share at an open mic' night.Bravo.

    . Rewarded 6


  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    I get so tired of reading ABC love poems , that there are no words to express how pleasantly surprised I am to run across an outstanding piece such as this. Exquisite language and such a beautiful visual of tranquility if lost love would find its way back {standing ovation]
    reenie

    . Rewarded 6


  • xToxicxCupcakesx
    November 7, 2007
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    This is great! It flows great!

  • midnightsun000 gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    Love this line, While your words recede on every hand/my tongue unlearns the words of explanation." Great, expressive imagery!

    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!

  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 15, 2007
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    absolutely beautiful

    great work


  • Rhyming From Rehab
    October 14, 2007

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    drowning worldpool of my wanting nature,Your lodestar love will lead my seeking prow

    back through dread and hazard Wow your imagery is really in this one! excellent write thank you for sharing this with me


  • Antipodi
    October 5, 2007
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    WoW! WoW! this has such wonderful imagery and burns so emotionally excellent write


    • jimmy20johns gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Hi. Many thanks for your comment on this piece. I actually hesitated to put it here - had doubts as to whether it worked for others. So, thanks again for your assurance. Cheers, jimmy
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