The rain poured down,
as she picked up the lighter.
Taking a deep breath
She inhaled its smokey goodness.
Feeling the joint taking effect
She leant back her head.
Taking another deep breath
She took out his photo.
A long snake of smoke
curled lovingly round his face.
Another deep breath
She's feeling better.
A smile crept across her face
a tear rolled down her cheek.
She smiled as she drew on.
The front door opened.
He stepped into the room
saw her, the joint, the photo and smiled.
Passing him the joint
he took a long deep breath.
They curled up on the sofa
smiling, laughing and smoking.
Author notes
Written October 8th, 2003
A contest entry
- Drug Addiction by isa.
300 points, ended April 13, 2004, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh, this has such a sweet feeling to it. i really like it. this structure of the poem is great and i love the ending to it, works really well with the whole piece. great write!
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This is absolutely beautiful
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Thank you so much for entering my contest. I really like your poem. drugs have the power to fuck with our emotions.....anyway, great write and good luck
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I would say, not your best work, but then again, I think I like your later stuff better. It feels like there is no emotion, and just actions. I do on the other hand, like the fact the fact that you are telling a little story with this piece. Good write.
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