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Miss Joplin Sings

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call Me mean, call me Evil
- I'm gonna take good care of Janis




and I split the atom
in my mouth
bit into Eve's apple, core'n'all
I've often been known to go Off
like a Big Bang,
bass drums play
percussion along my ribs
sucked this lemon-rind bare
of meat


Oh! God, tell me
what's it like Angeline?
to get down on your knees and beg
for the slice and ice
off the rim-shot glass


My muse laughed in my face
told me; you're an utter disgrace
bitchslapped my shameless arse
as she read me like a dirty magazine
flicked the pages over and over
sucked her teeth
tapped her feet
with a softer rhythm
on the floorboards
naked and filled
with sound


She said,
woman; you Love
with all you Got
see more than others
have often done,
said or even Forgot

 

- She's a Lady

 

 








 

 

Author notes

thank you suzi for the workshop on this one...

First two lines are from Turtle Blues by Janis Joplin


some Janis to listen and see:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JjD4eWEUgMM

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  • Cvillelisa
    October 24, 2007

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    I like the idea of the Muse reading you like a dirty magazine.

    Wonder what she'd be singing if she were alive today.
    As a kid, I was addicted to the movie the Rose for a long time - thinking it such a Life. Odd how that sort of thing is so Romantic when you are a kid.

    Fun read, Nursey.

    Lisa


  • Blondita
    October 20, 2007

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    Janis Joplin was a legend, as were so many of her contemporaries (Hendrix, Morrison etc). They don't make music like that no more...they don't make women like that no more...

    All the poncy talentless Cheryl Cole's of the world who can't sing, can't write a song, can't play an instrument...and they have the audacity to call it music...

    I can feel the intensity in this Gill. Her voice was a freight train that slammed right into the centre of the old ticker.

    Brilliant.

    XX


  • RollingStone
    October 20, 2007

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    janis would be proud

    I met janis joplin a couple of times, when I was much younger. she was like this.

    excellent poem about her. you've workshopped it well!


  • Grunts Girl
    October 20, 2007

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    'sucked this lemon-rind bare
    of meat'

    i know this.. so well
    damn woman
    this was grand!!!


  • DogFish silver member
    October 19, 2007
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    ouch!

    the super-nova that was Janis echoes on...


  • Life student
    October 19, 2007
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    Good god ....you are awesome!!!


  • EvilKate gold member
    October 19, 2007
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    Love Love Love

  • robinsonkin
    October 19, 2007

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    Janis reborn!

    WOW!!! NC, you've outdone yourself! This is like a newly discovered Joplin song! You must either be a fan and amazingly talented - or just amazingly talented! Either way this is incredible portrait!

  • Night Hope gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    Ohhh, Hell yeahhh...I have everything she ever recorded. Did ya ever hear the medley of "Amazing Grace" & "Highheeled Sneakers"??? It's a hoot. Great tribute to one of the most raw, real, radiant souls that ever carried a tune. May she ever rest in peace. Grand penning, Lady. Wanda


  • Annalise
    October 18, 2007
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    Oh, yeah.



  • Peteskid gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    she made me feel things when she sang a song, made a song hers, took over a stage... like few others; lovely to remember the thrill...PK


  • Woodworm
    October 18, 2007

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    Whatever Suzi done with this, she done good.


    Quick wormy fly-by:

    The play on rib/Eve is great: consider losing one of the ribs in the last two lines of S2?

    Maybe think about losing "for it" (I tried it without, and it sang more clearly).

    Did you mean "like a dirty magazine"? I must admit, I liked your jumbling: even if it was an error it might be worth keeping.

    The mangled and rather musical syntax in the last part is okay with me. "Naked and filled with sound" is marvellous. I tried reading this with a JJ rasp in my ears: it was good, definitely.

    Bass drums play percussion was OK at first: seemed pleonastic on second squiz. I twiddled with the LBs in this bit.

    Anyway, I think you have a potentially strong plume in the offing here. Ingredients all there: narrator, Janis, Eve, male constructions of science, etc etc. Post it somewhere nice.


    I love the Turtle Blues. And Janis, obviously. I bet her nuchal scutes would be gorgeous.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      thankie oh wormyone....

      fine editing eyes.. me likes and done changed some...


  • account disabled
    October 18, 2007
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    nothing's awkward except they pass too fast
    like Janis
    definitely a Lady


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    October 18, 2007
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    I have Janis hair!!

    *swoon*

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    LOL

    still floorbaords (is that intentional?)
    also see something I missed...
    'like dirty magazine' like A dirty magazine

    I love her voice in this..Janis becomes Angeline in a very nice way, I think. Guin is in good company.

    Also like the rhythm you created in the dirty magazine stanza very much.

    You worked at this, and it shows.

    'Tis poetry, I'd say




    • NurseChilly gold member
      October 18, 2007

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      and floorboards are a speciality of mine... heheheh

      hehehhehe.. and yes, Guin, Ange and Janis on a night out, one helluva party

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