The innocence is lost,
but the mystery remain.
You are the rose,
that my heart wants to claim!
My spirit wants to unite,
but your heart may be in pain.
You are so right,
for my heart to claim.
So lets free the spirit of the heart,
and then the innocence will be regained.
Author notes
This is my most recent poem partially inspired by someone I was dating at the time...
Written June 27th, 2003
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This was definately about a real person. The lady was going through a divorce when I became involved with her. She has two kids, whom I've never met. I feel the innocence is lost because she had them when she was very young. She got married to someone else she didn't really love but we shared a lot of love in the last several months. It may not be that we ever get married but this is a woman who gives a lot and doesn't always receive much in return. I love her.
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"The innocence is lost,
but the mystery remain."
I think these first lines are excellent and just hope that they're about some real person in your life cause if the innocence has been lost but mystery remains then it might just be love, my friend.
Damian. -
First off, I think you accidently miss-spelled
a word
for me heart to claim
I think you may have meant my
I like the poems subtle imagery.
Very well penned.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hope you plan to stay on at AP for awhile.
~Amy~
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Innocence is many things to many people, love is as well as hate are the universial lanuage. I did understand your poem, but I wish to question you on the lines of the "rose my heart wants to cliam". It almost sounds as if you look to women as object when in all reality they are oue equals without female presences the world would cease to exist. I guess the same could be said of males, but it is a male dominated society and look at the mess we cause. Well I guess I have gone on on and on enough, so good write,
peace be with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf -
the definition of innocence ,is a very individual thing....som
ething what may appear innocent to my eyes would probably not have the same effect on someone else.....lol ...your heart has it's own choices..."Y ou are the rose,
that my heart wants to claim! "..."You are so right,
for me heart to claim" .
A good write....thank u...hoping to see more of your writes
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