Jump back through the years
my 15 year old mind,
clicking in time to this thrusts and heaves
Validation was the inclination, did you want something more?
I meant not to be vulgar, I wouldn't lie
my intentions were just as wrong as yours.
It was all a trap, I admit it;
I wanted nothing more.
Young and sweet, I covered my defeat;
could you please step back, give me a moment to breathe?
Did you think it was all okay,
since I told you I was eighteen?
Oh but I was just a child,
lines blurred by worth, vodka and denial.
You got me all wrong, everything is all wrong,
regret in the sincerest form.
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It was my fault, I suppose.
I dont care what you think.
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Young and sweet, I covered my defeat;
could you please step back, give me a moment to breathe?
Did you think it was all okay,
since I told you I was eighteen?
That's my favorite verse in the poem! This poem is totally awesome! I love the feeling that it has and the way that it has the ability to move someone. I hope to see more good poetry from you and to see you around. I always have contests going on, you should enter a poem sometime. I am pretty sure that you will win some!
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I love this write.
Regret is the worst.
I know how you feel;
great job though
<3
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Right on, babe! Let it all hang out! That's what I do, down at the nude beach, just let it be so cool.
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Young and sweet, I covered my defeat...
Sometimes words form bullets and these bullets are aimed directly for the heart. That was tender, unguarded and beautiful.
much love,
Chops
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beautiful!! your writing isn't bad like you said in your front page.. its actually REALLY good!!...
it was a really personal write (DUH!... like every poem i guess is since you wrote them!).. but you know what i mean, right!!?
really well written and very good use of language i wish i had your vocabulary in my brain.. would do the trick when im sitting in english class!!!
I love how your rhyming scheme goes.. with two rhyming words in the one sentence.. excellent technique...
<3!!..xx
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whatever.. it wasn't your fault, so don't ever say that again. Nicely written and well expressed
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