Taking the path
that leads to destruction
oddly enough
there has been no obstruction.
Nothing at all to get in the way
disregarding the danger with fire we play.
Going downhill we slide really fast
Not heeding the stop signs just racing past.
We strike up the matches
starting a fire.
Raging out of control
the burning desire.
Daring each other
to go all the way
forgetting we'll have
the devil to pay.
Don't stop now
I really don't care
give the devil his due
it would only be fair.
Play a tune
we'll dance to his song
thank him and bow
he's helped us along.
He fans the flames
knowing full well
we'll be overcome
and see him in hell.
Don't stop now
it isn't our fate
We can't turn back now
it's already too late.
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Since Eve took the first bite, the devil's never made any of us do anything.
"Play a tune
we'll dance to his song
thank him and bow
he's helped us along.
He fans the flames
knowing full well
we'll be overcome
and see him in hell."
The devil's helped us along the path that leads to destruction, but we place ourselves upon it.
Excellent cautionary tale, told with a kind of jubilant desperation.
"Don't stop now
it isn't our fate
We can't turn back now
it's already too late."
The slide has reached a momentum and a point of no return. One might as well enjoy the ride and not worry about the fate it is too late to avoid.
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Your recent poems seem to have a common theme, living a little on the dangerous side. You do the subject justice with your wonderful rhythm and rhyme.
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this was written in Nov. of 2007 ... maybe I'm always on the edge
For some reason I like this one more than the others. I love this background too and want to find that picture again so I can do another. I can't for the life of me remember what I looked under. Temptation, maybe? Thank you for the lovely comment. Some of my more recent poems are a bit funny. A Day At The Beach ... (true) and last night I posted one about the need to bathe ... also true.
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I like Stanza two.
The whole write is a good read too.
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"Oddly enough there has been no obstruction,"
I get two knids of feeling about this, both are extremely vivid and a well worked rhythm and rhyme,
The third stanza was the best for me.
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I really liked reading this. I liked the rhythmn to the poem. Thank you for sharing your poem.
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A very interesting read
Ilove your style and the words you used, The rhyme is wonderfully done with that great flow in every stances.
LISA
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When I first saw the picture I thought of Adam and Eve. But then it sounds your version of the Devil went down to Gerogia.Because of this line
Don't stop now
I really don't care
give the devil his due
it would only be fair.
Play a tune
we'll dance to his song
thank him and bow
he's helped us along.
You have talent that can evolve there's no doubt about that sister "snickers" Good piece
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Delicious
Ooh nice little twist in the end. Covered in lust and heat, beautiful imagery and rhythm. Love it. As always, your talent shines brilliantly through your work. Thank you for sharing with us, Mary. Sorry for the short comment, but I'm still at work,
. Missing ya! Have a happy THanksgiving! 
Apologies for my absence... life and giving love another chance. Hope you're doing as lovely as you are, ^_^. Ta for now.
Always your little soul sistah/daughter,
~Stephy
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