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Fall Down; Don't Get Back Up

Missing image

Leave me behind and go on and live

Forget the one always ready to give

Lost at sea is where you’ll find me

It’s so dark and now I can’t breathe

 

This is the end of my life at last

Dreading the future to be like my past

I can’t hold out, can’t run on no hope

Watching you go, I just can not cope

 

So goodbye this life, good by love

Goodbye light kept too high above

This is the end, weep for me now

Watch as I fall into the darkness, down

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Kinda short I guess...

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  • Innocent Evil
    November 27, 2007

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    Short doent mean bad... This poem was again amazing... maybe insprational maybe my writers block will go away...


  • lemonhead
    November 25, 2007

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    Great! I LOVE it it has good.........everything!
    It's absolutly amazing!


  • GlowstickOfLove
    November 20, 2007

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    woah, this is awesome :]

    but its sad at the same time >.< bad cori!! no more sad!
    :]
    but i really like it :]

  • Justin3
    November 20, 2007
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    Beatiful flow and great diction, the title is an instant attraction as well.Good write.
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