Echoes of passion treading
the brilliant ocean floor.
Unspoken emptiness, pain
as the briny tide rises
I dropped a tear…..
It harbored my heart like
broken like grains of sand.
Graciously ebbing precious
memories of yesterday
I dropped a tear……
Alone I gait in quiet existence
long ebony locks windblown.
The sweetness of our kisses
Extending the seven seas
I dropped a tear…….
Lost at sea you shall never be
darling come back.
Atrocious waves release my love
sending him home
I drop a tear…..
Author notes
Prompt is this quote:
I dropped a tear in the ocean. The day you find it is the day I will stop missing you...Unknown
A contest entry
- I dropped a tear in the ocean.... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 28, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Lost at sea you shall never be
darling come back.
Atrocious waves release my love
sending him home
I drop a tear…..
You touched the depth of heart through the images and the sentiments as well..I love this piece..there is a vividness of highlighting the
various sentiments focused one by one and that is the strength of this poem..well done... -
this gave me some very good memories. Good write
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What a sad yet beautiful write
This stance is what I felt made the poem so deep;
"Alone I gait in quiet existence
long ebony locks windblown.
The sweetness of our kisses
Extending the seven seas
I dropped a tear……."
You have a wonderful ways with words.
LISA
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Nice way to grab the quote and make it your own. Love the way you made a part of the quote a refrain in your piece. Good luck mom. *heart* Yr son
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Brilliant novy. I really like this form and the poem is beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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