I wondered why no one would try
To warm to you or catch your eye
One so full of charm and wit
Must surely be a perfect fit
To hear a caring heart’s sweet call
And enter love’s romantic ball
But no one seemed to take a chance
So I asked if you’d like to dance
I warmed to you and felt I must
Give to you my heart and trust
Your loving words to me were such
I came to love so very much
I heard your words and thought they meant
The effort made was time well spent
But soon I came to realize
That they were nothing more than lies
I wondered why no one would try
To warm to you or catch your eye
Then I found out what they all knew
That love is just a game to you
A contest entry
- Whew! Number 10 - Favorites Frenzy by poetryality.
525 points, ended December 10, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful, yet sad and melancholy...
The perfect words flow from the heart in this bitter-sweet tale of one of the selfish games played by humanity, vividly told in all its truthful colors. Great job!!! Peace, Cyn
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A poem with many applications
"I wondered why no one would try
To warm to you or catch your eye
Then I found out what they all knew
That love is just a game to you"
I wonder why human beings are so taken up with surface attraction? The words of a politician that don't always stack up when he's in. The claims of advertising that doesn't fit the product purchased afterward. The claims of someone in a job interview that don't produce when the job is his/hers. And of course the games men and women play with each other. Great poem!
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I thought I had commented on this poem in the past as I know and I read and enjoyed it at least once before, but I guess not so here I am.
Another great write, I love the easy rhyming and rhythm which you seem to have perfected. (I was actually reading from your book earlier today as well.) Love the idea of the poem which has the story itself, but also the bigger picture idea that often we don't see what others see (at least not initially,) but that does not mean they are not seeing anything.
Nice write.
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A little on the sad side, with an ironic twist at the end. In pity and compassion you reached out, only to be betrayed by she whom you loved. This poem caught my interest and held me until the end. Great job, Steve.
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Wow! this is wonderful, and haven't most of us fallen into this trap of one's love game. I didn't expect this ending, which is what makes this so brillant, all very tender and then the twist of reality.
loved this
blessings,
Michelle
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What a wonder this rhythmic poem is my friend. I have always adored your ability to write any given situation into rhyme. Wonderful! I love how the poem painted a picture of perfection in a relationship then, to end in a broken splendor of sorrowful words. Sometimes we rush in, head first and end up with a headache. I think true love takes times and all the options must be equally weighed. Life is too short for crap, especially when it comes to love. You have captured the essence of the prompt with great fervor. I thank you for this entry and wish you the best in all you set out to do in life.
Much Love & Light ♥
Renee
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Wow ...
This is really well written ...
It was very sweet at the beginning and made me feel warm and fuzzy
And then you just turned it around ...
And made my smile become a frown ...
Excellent! [As always}
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Hard knocks
...and yet, those of us prone to perpetual fits of optimism, continue to grasp hope.
A bittersweet tale, but your caring, gentlemanly heart shows through.
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Awwwwwwwwww this is sad.
It has nice flow, and lovely lines.
The last few lines ahhh just made me ache.
A emotional read, well done.
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