On a hillside called Calvary
Hung the King of the galaxy,
Raised in garden-walled gallery,
Fruit filled branch; the root of Jesse,
A shepherd of sheep gone astray.
For the sin filled earth below
Where up and down the people go
To wherever the breezes blow
This was the price love had to pay.
Faces white, angels quiver,
Icy breezes quake and shiver,
Through the night that runs forever
Flows Jesus' blood like a river,
Flowing downward for love's display.
Criminals hung on either side
Overlook the place where we abide.
With silent tears His Father cried.
This was the price love had to pay.
His hands and feet were tightly nailed.
By the garden, women wailed.
The King of Kings last breath exhaled.
In eyes of men, the King had failed.
Like sheep His friends scattered away,
But who had known what God had planned;
The cost His justice would demand?
What love we failed to understand!
This was the price love had to pay.
Woman waking, coming early
Did see a light shining brightly
And heard songs that echo cheerly
From the angel speaking clearly;
A hope for sheep who went astray
To the wicked with burdens weary;
A light of hope to the dreary;
Joy for the burdened and teary;
This was the price love had to pay.
Alive He waits by night and day
For all under the dragon's sway.
He calls to those who've gone astray.
The curse is lifted when we pray
To Him who died; our debt to pay.
He longs to set the captives free
And so He stands by steadily
For those who come on bended knee
Knowing the price love had to pay.
Now we see through mirror unclear
That hangs before us all the year.
Shadows of the world appear.
In us He abides always near
Reaching down to those far away.
From Him the water of life flows.
Our sins and waywardness He knows.
To the broken, mercy He shows
Knowing the price love had to pay.
Sometimes life is sweet and hearts glad;
A painted rose on empty pad;
A love struck lass with handsome lad;
A young flower in crimson clad;
Full contentment of love's display
And sometimes through nights dark and blue
The troubles come riding two and two.
The King remains loyal and true
Knowing the price love had to pay.
In His love we will still delight
As He weaves His plans for the night;
For often through the silent frights
At funerals with tears and fights
Content to have our love's display.
Even when death hangs overhead
And days are filled will fears and dread
Our faith hangs on by just a thread
Knowing the price love had to pay.
We cry to Him in darkest grief
When we find no other relief.
Hope comes dazzling in our belief
And flamed upon the brazen Chief
To those who have gone far astray.
We come to the cross bent and kneeled;
To the King and His shield.
We come with nothing and we yield
Knowing the price love had to pay.
In a list
A contest entry
- Cry Out to Jesus by walkinthereign.
355 points, ended January 12, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Theme "Jesus" aka Based on Christ 2 by C.o.g..
1200 points, ended February 20, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the Love of GOD! by beisekergirl.
525 points, ended March 14, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow...this is beautiful...I am not a "CHRISTIAN" in the sense of the word that many percieve it to be. I love Jesus...I am kind and I believe in compassion and forgiveness. I really enjoyed this write...Thanks for sharing!
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I Cannot Believe............
This did not win GOLD!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is so beautiful is seems as a song!! I love evryword of evry line.My favorite lines are in Stanza two..Faces white,angels quiver,Icy breezes quake and shiver....loves those lines and that stanza in general it waws my favorite!!! Very vivid imagery and exellent rhymes sceam just loved it all!!! Thanks for shairng this at Easter time!!!~~Toni~~
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This is a sensational write, and tribute to the almighty Lord and Saviour, I love the smooth flow of your stanza's and your ryhme scheme is excellent, almost adding a touch of symbolism in itself, the line that struck out most was " To him who died our debt to pay" Excellent! So true, that drew me in to continue reading, this poem really makes you think and reflect, good work and good luck!
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excellent~
Such beautiful poetry you have here....
I also love the imagery as well
Congrats on the honorable mention
Will try to catch up when I am feeling better
Still very sick
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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Bravo melphleg
Beautifully written poem. So much imagery. I really like the last line ending on each stanza. Good job.
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This is a great poem many truths are in it that many should abide to and realize its meaning. thanks for entering with a wonderful, well written poem. That only Gods grace would give! God bless
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fantastic
Fantastic is a meagre word to describe how this poem affected me, but it is all I could come up with at the moment. This is such an incredibly well put together poem (I am having much trouble here!) and I am so glad you composed it. May God continue to bless you and your pen. This poem would make a really good song.
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i would have given this one more than an honourable but then i wasnt the judge and didnt see the other entries... all i can say tis its a fookin good poem.
hugs,
georgie,
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this was a really touching poem, and to be honest, i can't believe you remember all this happening, my history isn't too sharp, but wasnt the battle of calvary during the civil war? well, im glad you're still writing, well into your 80s bravo!
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It's not about a war, it's about Jesus Christ dying on Calvary.
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oh, are you sure, maybe the subject matter isn't clear enough... i definatly didn't see any references to religion or even Christ!
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Stanza 1 line 4 "the root of Jesse" refers to Jesus
Stanza 2 line 4 specifically says "Jesus' blood.
Stanza 3 line 3 "King of Kings" refers to Jesus
Calvary is the name of the hill upon which he was crucified. There are many other references to the devil, sin, prayer, etc.
Still I'm glad you liked the poem. The beauty of poetry is that the reader brings their own experiences to the piece and receives meaning from it not necessarily intended by the author.
Cavalry can refer to soldiers on horses, but it is spelled different. I don't know of a battle in any place called calvary.
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excellent~
Sheer perfection...
I too can tell you spent a lot of time on this one..
It flows so smoothly...Your getting better and better with your poetry...
This certainly is a winner in my book
Hoping you get a trophy for this one sweetie
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Im really impressed by this poem!
This is a beautiful piece. I can tell you spent a lot of time on it. I like the end rhyme in this poem and it flows nicely. You really give hope to people who are lost or feel lonely or down trodden.
Life is hard and we really need God by our side to make it through. It's amazing that when God had so many choices to have an easy happy-go-lucky life He chose His powers for the greater good of mankind rather than the greater good for Himself. His sacrifice is the ultimate one. He suffered so we would have a God who identified with the weak and the weary! I would like to read some of your other poems so I would love it if you messaged me back so I know who you are!
*Two suggestions: Your poem might flow more smoothly at the end if you take out the "with" in the second to last line. Also it would show more honor to God if you capitalized the He and Him that refer to Jesus.
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Thanks
Thanks for the compliment. I appreciated it the high praise for an unfinished poem. I was still editing. I'm done for now, but will come back to correct any more typos and flow problems.
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