This pain, please make it end
I can’t take it anymore
I will not be your slave
I’ll never be your whore
You have used me
Then abused me
Treated me like shit
Now it’s finally your turn
And I'm though with it
Just stop with all your lies
I won't listen anymore
I'm through with all this fighting
And this never ending war
Lets lay it on the table
And just be done with it
As far as I'm concerned
Your not worth a shit
Author notes
This was written almost 5 years ago in March, exactly one year before my marriage ended to the day, I found it in one of my folders and thought I would share.
What did you think
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Correction:
This pain, please make it end
I can’t take it anymore
I will not be your slave
I’ll never be YOUR whore...
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great, i can almost feel the pain that your going through. I feel almost the same way because i hgave gone through and am still going through it. hold strong.
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I too know this feeling. The feeling of losing what you thought would last a lifetime. But what makes me smile is the last line...you realize that if he wont be there for you and love you for YOU he is not worth your time or effort. Great write
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I am sorry to hear that this is the result of troubles you endured. You did a great job expressing your feelings here. Great write
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If one invested in a relation things that matter and require a great effort or expose the depth of ones soul and there is no return other than showing there is no similar contribution to the relation, it becomes difficult to maintain it. Contracts we uphold or ditch as easily as the legal systems allow us to do, but in relations we invest our emotion which none of our laws can accurately assess. On a personal level as well as on a wider scale this poem applies to relations that affect the core of our being. It is sad to notice always that the argument of some to become involved in a relation, has little to do with true emotion and often exposes a lack of wit that is embarrassing. Thank you for creating and sharing. Stay strong and take care,
S
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great write,one can almost feel the pain, oblviously no one knows your pain and am not tring to say one does from the poem. it just gives off this vibe. anger then almost to closure. again great write
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that's brilliant, well done
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The title drew the reader to read,the poem has an assertive voice and portrays the reasons for the choices made in a clear voice.NB line four you/your.
Am not keen on the usage of the word sh*t within poetry but in reality abusive partners make their partners feel exactly like that and there is nothing poetic about being treated like that.Well done for walking away.
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I'm sorry about your marriage. I am nearly one year into mine and I am happier than I have ever been before. Though my sister in law is just getting out of hers.
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so much emotion and I can see through this how much pain you have/had. I am so sorry for the "war" that you had to endure and I believe it will take some time for you to heal. I am sorry that I don't know so much about you yet I try to comment, my observation through this old poem is that you really had enough and that you had to stand up for yourself. (hope I'm correct) yet reading the Author notes and the fact that you posted it now so many years later tells me that you are still experiencing some kind of emotion. good/bad??? Not sure. I just hope that you can find freedom through your writing. And I would like to quote a line from the book "The Diary of a Young Girl"
Paper is more patient than people ~ Ann Frank
All the best
Lovies
Becks
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awww honey.
absolutely beautiful creation.
I'm sorry for your marriage falling apart, but I'm not sorry you shared this with us.
very well done sweety
♥ Unity
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Ouch, strong emotions but can understand them for sure, sorry you had to go through all that, very well penned, each line quite powerful in your words.
thanks for sharing
blessings always,
adriana
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