Swallowed in this saline,
I'm nervous in the water;
this flux is pulling me under.
I can't trust myself,
when it comes to these lies;
my sweetness floats above.
Drowning in the depth,
I wake to this world;
I'm falling faster into forever.
I linger in this bath tub,
suffocating on my regret;
my addiction has captured me.
Author notes
Written July 24th, 2003
A contest entry
- Drug Addiction by isa.
300 points, ended April 13, 2004, 35 entries
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this is a really strong write. i love the imagery and the general feeling the poem gives me when i read it. everything in it is so true of how one really feels and the ending is perfect.
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amazing poem! i really this poem you entered into my contest. i like how you only mentioned that its really your addiction at the end and not the beginning. Good luck with the contest!
-Isa -
*thumbs up*
It's odd how people use such fancy words to say something so simple: it kicks ass. It makes me think, and wonder about what all you've been through. -
Eek! This poem was amazing! I don't even know what to say really, I think that it has different meanings to anyone that reads it and I found it very deep and riveting myself! Very nicely done. Keep up the amazing work. *Sonya*
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This was very very very well written and extrememly eloquent and elogant. Wonderful job. The emotion is not choking th reader yet silently stalking them which i though i havent seen it often is something that i love, especaily in a poem like this. It is almost as if your emotion is like your addiction always there never letting you rest or simply live happily without it. That nagging little dog addiction. Great job. Happy writings.
Idiotic Soul -
Wow. Very nice write. Deep. Murky even. But great imagry. Addictions do just that, capture. And you have captured the feeling well here. Excellent Write. Take Care.
Treble -
wow.....i need more time to think...this has to be the most thought provoking poems i have read on this silly site. i love it how you contrast it to water. i love this, its so deep. i know how it feels like to have something take hold of you and pull you under, like alcohol. awesome personal write.
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